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[APP] Babado (IGN); My application for Egypt
Topic Started: Sep 8 2011, 06:20 PM (240 Views)
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IGN:Babado
OOC name:( Not sure what you mean by this, my real name, I guess?) Jordan Cavell
Past Minecraft experiences:I have played Minecraft for awhile and have a fair understanding on how it works. Im not so good at building, I could build a smallish decent house. Im much better at patterns and the interior though. I love mediveal buildings and always try to build something like that.
Past RP experiences: I have roleplayed lightly in forums. I still heavily roleplay in World of Warcraft, I would say im pretty good at it.
What can you offer to Egypt: I hope to offer good writing to the citizens of Egypt, Enchaning their knowledge of the great Egyptian Literature. I shall hopefully take up a posistion of Scholar.
Activity in hours per week:8-10 perhaps more.
Age:Im really wierd about giving my age out, I have only given out my name over the internet.
I promise Im very mature and sensible though.
Gender:Male
Contact information:Jorca@sky.com and Skype if needed
What factions have you previously joined, and why did you leave them:None

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Character's age:Abayomi Meaning:Bringer of joy.


Character's appearance: (One paragraph) Abayomi is a average man. Tanned slightly, He always acts rather nervous while out and about. His hair is a dark brown, his eyes being of almost the same colour. He is of normal height for a man, His face is rather smoothe for a man who lives in a harsh desert. He is most likely found wearing a Egyptian robes with a bag of scrolls tied to his belt also, a sapphire pendant is on his neck, usually always visible. He has nothing out of the odd and is usually found with a ink and quill. ((Appearance is where I fall))

Character's ambitions: (One paragraph) Abayomi wishes to be a great and powerful scholar of Egypt, writing down the stunning citys history, and other things such as poems and storys. He wishes to broaden the lowly peasants Literature skills and to improve their knowledge of the great powerful city of Egypt. He hopes to broaden the minds of citys and to be a powerful Scholar throughout Egypt.


Character's personality traits: (One paragraph) Abayomi is usually calm and polite, although he seems nervous with people he does not know and calm with people he does not. He shows no trace of Jealousy ( Spelt right?) and is often calm facing Anger. He is always nibling at a quill or writing things.


Character's background: (Two paragraphs)
Abayomi was born in a small town in the desert, His parents being somewhat rich were able to get him what he wanted. Although he never wanted much apart from Books and ink, he was a keen writer, He was taught at home, He was never intersted in much at writing, While the other children ( and slaves) worked on the farm, never caring much for what happend. Until a arguement broke out between a Slave and its master, which ended in The Slave master hitting the slave, and beating him. As Abayomi watched this from his window, he felt a sudden rush of anger, infact, it was the only time he had felt anger. He stood up from his writing, and headed out to the Slaves master, He had a small "rant" at him and, that was the day he wanted to help expand the knowledge of the lower citizens, to help them, to guide them into a better future

At the age of Nineteen. One day, The village was raided by bandits they ran through the down setting things alight and beating people out on the streets, they looted houses, shops everyone and everything , He woke up to his mother shouting for help, he smelt a strong waft of smoke, he realized , the house was crackling with fire he sat upright, heading into his parents study, snatching a pendant and a bag of gold, if it was needed, he heard his mother scream, a thud outside, he crept carefully to the door, to see a cutlass wielding bandit standing, over his mothers body, his father, no where in sight, had he abandonded him and his mother? No, He would not have, he was loyal. Abayomi waited for the thug to head upstairs before running out, ducking into cover outside, he looked at what use to be his home, his town, his life, it was in runis. The buildings fell apart as they burnt down, bodies lay in the street, he ducked out of the village, being careful not to be seen. His books, his work all lost the only thing he had left was his Pendant and a bag of gold.

He believed the gods had granted him luck that day.

After his escape he began a jorurney to Egypts main city ( I think thats where the pharoh is based?) he built small shelters and usually traveld with traders, hitch hiking along the way, He still remembers the tragic events from his town, how his father was no where to be seen, how his work had simplily burnt away. He vowed to travel to Egypts capital, to teach lower citizens how to read and write, considering it was a rare skill. He will teach people knowledge, infleunce the Slave masters to learn, and let them go. He will help the slaves, he will teach the poor, he will be a influence in Egypt..


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Edited by Babado, Sep 9 2011, 08:36 AM.
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TrompeOeil
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Right, so far only a handful of people have had a perfect app on their first try. No worries though, when you're through with Egypt you'll be almost a pro at RP. I'll break it down section by section.

Appearance: I understand how people aren't good at this, to them it's just their MC skin. Though I ask that you think about making yourself a second skin, you are to help you and others immerse themselves in your character so that not only do we see the skin you have but we see what you see your skin as.
Things you could add- Facial features, eye shape, height, weight, noticeable body features (scars, blemishes) details on clothing from shoes, pants, shirt, jewlery etc.

Amibitons: This one was even tough for me, (I made an app for kicks too, it's in my sig). You could expand on his experience in literature that will help him with his goal, perhaps a sneak preview at why he wants to do this. Other things also perhaps, if he wants to be known throughout the land.

Personality: This, I can let slide but even yours is a bit short. Expend more on his personality, how does he react to anger? Passion? Challenges? How is he around people he does know, you did a great job with the little nibling thing. Does he have any more quirky habits?

History: Expand more on his childhood, his schooling perhaps. More on the actual raid, his experiences through it, a bit about the bandits? Why he chose Egypt? Why he wants to teach?

Don't think of this as a chore for yourself, think of it as an improvement and a challenge to see how well you can improve.
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Personally, I think his basic character type really appeals to me. I can picture my character (also a type of scholar) getting along quite well with your character because he finally has someone on his own itelectual level to talk to (IC, of course. Trompe is smart, but Ghost isn't a scholar). I really hope you take Trompe's advice and flesh out your character a little more. I think you'd make a great addition to Egypt.

Also, where did you get your name? What language is it? It sounds cool.
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I'd like to thank you for joining Egypt,
I am quite glad that we have someone else who appears to know something about Ancient Egyptian Society!
I am the head priest (Acolyte) for Egypt, you say you wish to become a scholar, talk to me in game.
Looking forward to discovering how far you knowledge extends into your character; IC, and OOC (out of character)
See you in game,
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The name is Egyptian I think.

Im currently adding more detial onto it now.

Egypt also needs slaves =D

~Babado

*Edited due to spelling mistake

*Edited again due to failure to spell Egypt <.<
Edited by Babado, Sep 9 2011, 11:32 AM.
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Its all updated =D

Anything I missed out?
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Babado
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I could compile a list of Egyptian names and there meanings if you want? I have nothing else to do at the minute, I was banned off my main server I was a mod on for saying it needed change <.<
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Welcome to Egypt!

Thank you for showing a remarkable improvement and the dedication to join one of the best factions in Aswein. Log on when you can.
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=D Fantastic, now to do the actuall whitelist. Woo.
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And, Mind if I make a list of Egyptian names and there meaning?
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Go for it.
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