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| Tweet Topic Started: Oct 31 2005, 06:11 PM (68 Views) | |
| Tony | Oct 31 2005, 06:11 PM Post #1 |
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any takers to read somethign for my character im typing in wordpad....im doing a developmental thjread for squall incorporates all life around... |
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| Lucifer | Oct 31 2005, 06:40 PM Post #2 |
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ill read, im bored....but it better not make me fall asleep lol |
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| Tony | Oct 31 2005, 06:59 PM Post #3 |
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im pm you link...when its posted.....im doing developmental thread im doing for mmy character Squall..im doing the whole real life thing and putting alot of detail into this....but yeah ill pm ou with link when im done..which wil be in a few minutes from now... |
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| Lucifer | Oct 31 2005, 07:13 PM Post #4 |
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I read half of it......not that it was boring...but I just plain hate reading. It's good, but you still have plenty of grammatical and spelling errors(Wordpad has no spellcheck, I know, it blows.) I'll post some examples of your grammar errors. He looked up and seen the new age technology of the express lines. Word choice, seen should be saw....It's easier to say a sentence outloud(to your self) to see if the sentence makes sense. In his mind he see's himself stepping up and making the girl stop crying and telling the guy off. There's no apostrophe in sees. Apostrophes are only for ownerships and when you make two words into one(forgot name, I think it's conjunctions.) And the main problem, you use no apostrophes in words like I've, don't, and other words... That's about it really..... |
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| Tony | Oct 31 2005, 07:19 PM Post #5 |
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what about the content?was the content good... |
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| Lucifer | Oct 31 2005, 07:25 PM Post #6 |
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Can't tell from the first half, which is just description of the city and the incident with the little girl..... |
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