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| Tweet Topic Started: Aug 22 2006, 02:32 PM (109 Views) | |
| Zabuza Hyuuga | Aug 22 2006, 02:32 PM Post #1 |
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Here I go again, my Profile re-done. DISCLAIMER: History is very... long Name: Hyuuga, Zabuza Gender: Male Age: 16 Clan: Hyuga Preferred Jutsu Type: Ninjutsu Personality: Zabuza is usually serious, sometimes cold. He was little when the Hyuga sidebranch attacked a main branch set of homes. His parents died, and he was thrown into the streets of a different village. He was picked up into a different family, who were poor, who owned iron shop. He wants to avenge his parent and hates all sidebranchers. Appearence: Head: Hair is worn pulled back Uper Body: Wears a baige shirt with the Hyuga clan logo on the back of it. Under his callor is a necklace with a gem on it. The gem was the earing his mother wore when she died. He also has many bandages around his mouth Arms: Shirt sleeves go down past elbows a couple inches Hands: He has gloves with back hand protectors. Hyuga family seal is printed on them. Waist: Has head protector as a belt that faces to the right of him Lower body: Wears blue pants that goes to his ankels Feet: Wear open-toed sandals ((Flip-flops)) Money: 100 Yen ((PS In Naruto, it is Ryo)) Personal Status Rank: Genin Chakara: 50 Mental: Charisma: 9 Intellect: 9 Will-Power: 9 Physical: Strength: 10 Stamina: 9 Agility: 8 Skills: Ninjutsu: 7 Genjutsu: 0 Taijutsu: 1 Summoning: 1 Sealing: 3 Medical Practice: 0 Weapon Practice: Sword Skill: 3 Axe/Hammer Skill: 0 Fan Skill: 0 Polearm Skill: 0 Instrument Skill: 0 Armor Skill: 2 Shield Skill: 0 Ninja Skill: 3 Jutsu Types: Fire: 2 Water: 0 Earth: 0 Wind: 0 Dark: 4 Light: 0 Ice: 1 Thunder: 10 Sound: 2 Sand: 1 Plant: 0 Bloodline: 10 Custum: 1 Known Jutsu Ninjutsu Thunder Clap [NJ] Description/Seals: [Hare] After performing the seals, your hands become charged full of electricity, causing a loud thunder-like noise whenever you throw punch. This adds some extra damage to your melee for the next three posts. Effect: Causes a shocking effect. Cost: 6 Genjutsu None Taijutsu None Medical Jutsu None Summoning Jutsu None Weapon Jutsu None Bloodline Limit Byakugan Abilities None Equipment/Items Weapon Inventory Kunai X10 Description: Light Throwing Daggers Effect: None Weight: Light Type: Iron Throwing Stars X10 Description: Projectiles with sharp edges all around. Effect: None Weight: Light Type: Iron Fuuma Shuriken X7 Description: Projectile with four large blades Effect: None Weight: Medium Type: Iron Armor/Clothing Normal Clothing ((Clothing Stated in appearance)) Weight: Light Type: None Items None History: He didn't know exactly where he was born. All he knew at the time was that he was a Hyuuga, a main branch Hyuuga. He didn't know his real father, he was at war for the little time Zabuza was with his family. His mom was the only Ninja in the family and she taught him a little on Chakra and how to control it. Just before the accident, he was able to form thundercloudsbasic for a Genin, advanced for a 4 year-old. One night, his father came home, it was raining. He rushed into the house, and went straight for my mom. He looked hurried and scared. They spoke for a little and I was soon swept into my mother's arms and ran toward the door, my dad was just about to open the door from our house when he was pushed back by the door being slammed open. All he remembers was a bunch of men, lights, falling to the floor and screaming, from his mom. The fall knocked him out. When he woke up, it was still raining. He looked around. He saw his mom and dad dead on the ground. He didn't understand why his parents wouldn't move. He started crying, and crying. The harder he cried, the more ir rained, soon, he buried his face in his mom's body and thunder lit up the sky. He heard screams outside and he smelt smoke. He went outside to see lighting striking houses and causing fires. He stopped crying and the lightning stopped, just the last thunderous boom filled the sky. The village looked at him. He was ashamed and he ran off. After miles and miles of walking, he landing on the sand of a hot beach. His clothes were tattered, and he was only 6. He spent two years running away from home. He has been beating for stealing many a times, maybe even twice a day. No one talked to him. As he was laying there, lips dried and bloody, he heard a voice. "Hey, little one, come here." He looked up to see an old man standing over him. "Come on, you look tired, let me carry you!" The man picked young Zabuza up and carried him for a while, they finally stopped, when he opened his eyes, he was in a dimly lit room. On a nice bed. "Hello young man, I am Koji Baranji. Me and my wife would like to keep you here for a while. I'll explain later, now, get some rest." When Zabuza finally woke up, Koji and an old lady were sitting next to him. "Hello, and good morning." HE looked around, the two were old and friendly-looking. "Son, what's your name?" "Son?" "Yes, we would like you to be our son. I am Koji, I work for a Ironsmith. this is my wife, Saku." "I... I am... I am Zabuza Hyuuga." "Hello Zabuza. Welcome home." After living with Koji and Saku for 8 years, Zabuza was skilled in making armour from his father's Ironsmiths shop. One day his mom and dad told him that they were going to spend a lot of their saved money to enrol him in their villages Ninja Academy. He thanked them and tried to stop them, but they were set on it. The next day, when he went out doing errands. He heard news of a murder. He ran home to tell his parents but just to see them dead on the floor. A note was put in the wall by a knife. "We are watching you, Mainbrancher, you are the only one to survive from that night. Being a NInja will just make your case worse!" It was written in blood. Zabuza left the home in a rush he ran and ran the whole day, when it was dark, he couldn't stop running. He finally tripped over a rock but couldn't get himself up. After trying to get up three times, he stopped, and lay there. After a couple seconds, he went into a deep sleep. He dreamed of the terrible night almost a decade ago. He woke up to find it midday. He got up a started walking away from his village. He just kept on walking, and walking, and walking. After 2 years of walking, he settled down in a village. He now had over 1000 Ryo. just enough to get in the academy. He asked around the vilage for the nearest Shinobi village. He was pointed to the Hidden Village of the Mist. When he got there, he found it completely destroyed. He was shocked. He traveled to the nearest village to hear that all Hidden Villages have been destroyed. But on the other side of the country, there is a Ninja Academy with Hyuugans. He was enlightened and immedeatley set off. When he got there, he was accepted ((As long as two admins do)) and now begins his journey of becoming a Shinobi Genin... Updated |
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| [-Cloud-] | Aug 22 2006, 02:44 PM Post #2 |
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Only a few problems. Summoning Thunder would do nothing, seeing Thunder is just a sound made by Clouds. No, you cannot summon Lightning. Basic Use of Chakara isn't a Ninjutsu, and summoning Thunder or Lightning isn't a Basic Summon Jutsu. Go to the Rules Section and find the list of Basic Jutsu's.. and find some Jutsu's that fit your character for you to use. Also, make sure to go over the rules before you select your Jutsu's. The History is fine, but I suggest you add a bit more onto it after reading the History of the RPG. It would be wise seeing there currently are no Hidden Villages. |
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| Zabuza Hyuuga | Aug 22 2006, 02:57 PM Post #3 |
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There... The summons and Chakra control thing is out... I put in a real jutsu, and me being accepted into a Hidden Village is out also. |
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| Mattox | Aug 22 2006, 02:59 PM Post #4 |
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Zabuza, not to be a nit-picker, but just as a suggestion. You're all over the place with your stats. You should try to make a more uniform ninja, instead of being relatively adept in everything. It's good to be able to adjust to your situation, but if you can't do anything better than anyone else, you won't get far. A good example of this is your weapon skills. Not only do you not even have a base weapon, but you have 5 different stats used; That's bad. I suggest you go over it again and reassign your stats based on the Ninja you think can be strong enough to accomplish your goals. But that's just my opinion, do as you like. |
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| [-Cloud-] | Aug 22 2006, 03:03 PM Post #5 |
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I aprove the History allowing you to be Hyuuga.. you need one more aproval.. if you want any last minute changes.. do so before another Aproves and accepts you. |
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| Zabuza Hyuuga | Aug 22 2006, 03:04 PM Post #6 |
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I hope this is what what Mattox... Update |
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| Mattox | Aug 22 2006, 03:09 PM Post #7 |
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What I had was still a suggestion, and you may choose to do it, or you may choose not to heed my warning. I will approve of your character based on the history, but I suggest you go over your stats one more time and consider "Am I really going to use Medical Jutsu, Summoning, Ninjutsu, Taijutsu and Genjutsu all the time? Should I really have low stats in all the different elements instead of having good stats in one or two? Is it really a good idea to have weak base stats in favor of balanced element power?" These are questions who's answers are up to you, but I think you should consider it once more. Remember: To be good at everything is to be great at nothing. |
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| Zabuza Hyuuga | Aug 22 2006, 03:57 PM Post #8 |
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There! MY stats are now my stats... |
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| Mattox | Aug 22 2006, 04:03 PM Post #9 |
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Uh, this is kinda funny actually, but you seem to be short a few. Your stats should add up to 106. The Cost on jutus is the chakra cost when using it, by the way. You should have a good 10 more stats to use. I made the same mistake, so don't worry about it. Sorry for being such a bother. |
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| Zabuza Hyuuga | Aug 22 2006, 04:23 PM Post #10 |
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10 has been added Mattox-kun |
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| Mattox | Aug 22 2006, 04:45 PM Post #11 |
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Alright, you're good to go |
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