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Sabku Kairai And Sensei Request Jutsus
Topic Started: Sep 23 2006, 07:00 AM (78 Views)
Silver Wolf
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One puppet and sand obsesive.
Sunaarashi no jutsu [NJ]Sandstorm Jutsu
Description/Seals: [ram, hare, snake] By using these seals, you can create a sandstorm that surrounds the entire area and everyone in it, that makes the opponent or group of people unable to see while you are using the sand to see through giving you a somewhat good eyesight in battle.
Requirements: Sand:5 Wind: 5 Intelligence:5
Cost: 5

Sabure Gouben No Jutsu [NJ] (Sand Pool Jutsu)
Seals: Dog, Ram, Snake, Ox
Description: Using the soil around you, you can create a knee-deep amount of sand around you that can be used to create a source of sand that can be controlled by your chackra by realesing chackra into it or else the sand used will be twice as difficult to control and will make you waist double the chackra when it's used in a jutsu. This is used as a source of sand for a sand jutsu and can be eventually as easy to control as your own sand.. The amount of sand you can create is increased through training. This sand can be mixed with your own so that you can control the sand better and keep it for another time.
Requirments: Sand:10 Intelligence: 5
Cost: 10 and it steadily rises as you create more sand.



Genin

(I can't learn these yet but my sensei knows them and will eventually teach me these jutsus)
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Kilala
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I'm going to grade these somewhat but I'll leave it up to Cloud, Ripper or Kenny to decide if they are acceptable jutsu. I will place my opinions on it though, geologically and physically correct, as well as grammaricaly.

Sunaarashi no jutsu [NJ]Sandstorm Jutsu
Description/Seals: [ram, hare, snake] By using these seals, you can create a sandstorm that surrounds the entire area and everyone in it, that makes the opponent or group of people unable to see while you have a perfectly clear vision
Requirements: Sand:5 Wind: 5 Intelligence:5
Cost: 5


So, everyone except you can see through the sand? Why would you have a clear vision? I know that you are a sabaku but maybe it's better to say your vision through the senses is not blurred because of your joint relationship with the element. Also, I don't think you need to add wind to it, considering you are able to make sand float, by control of chakra. But that's just my opinion. I also think the cost would be a few more points higher, like 7 or so, and if it was me I would add damage to it, since it's a ninjutsu. Maybe the sand can sting their eyes causing their vision to be bad, think sand attack in Pokemon. Blinding sand to the eyes reduces accuracy.

Sabure Gouben No Jutsu [NJ] (Sand Pool Jutsu)
Seals: Dog, Ram, Snake, Ox
Rank: Gennin
Description: Using the soil around you, you can create a knee-deep amount of sand around you* that can be used to create a source of sand that can be controlled by your chackra by realesing chackra into it or used as a source of sand for a sand jutsu.
Requirments: Sand:10 Intelligence: 5
Cost: 10 for genin, 25 for chunnin, 50 for jonin, etc.(increases by 25 per rank)


This one is even worse in my opinion. Ok....you "Create" a knee-deep amount of sand around you when there is already the soil around you? More like you manipulate the soil around you to raise up to the level of your knees, not creating it since it's already there. So...it boosts your chakra (basically pp of a sand jutsu?) because if you're trying to say that this move creates sand, that's already a valid move and this has no need. Also the increasing of the cost in higher ranking ninja is beyond me. If anything I'd say it would be easier to control as you progress, not harder.



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Silver Wolf
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One puppet and sand obsesive.
The sandstorm jutsu is exclusive to me and my sensei because we use our element of the wind to scatter the sand and make a sandstorm.

The other one is just manipulating the minerals in the soil, causing the soil to become sand and having it surround you. The downside is that the sand is twice as hard to control making you waist double the chackra. The reason it does this is that the natural sand that you always use and control is simple for you to control but new sand is hard to control at first then it gradually becomes easier. If I have a gourd with me, I can store it away and use it more.

I should have posted this info with the jutsus. My bad. :P
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Kilala
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hmmm ok. but i won't approve them. goodluck. btw is your sensei an NPC?
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alrighty, my turn.

1) Those Jutsu's are not powerful at all... a Genin could learn them.

2) Why does the chakara go up from rank? Chuunin, Jounin and Kage are all just titles given to Ninja. When Shikamaru become a Chuunin, he wasn't any stronger than he was just before that.... so why do the requirements go up?

3) I don't see how you're able to see in the sand storm still, unless you are a Hyuuga... you won't be able to see in it. Now, if you make an ability that allows you to fewel the sands movements.. you'd be able to basically feel where the opponent is in a thick sand storm such as that.

4) Asnwer these, fix them up a little bit.. and then I will make the requirements.
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Silver Wolf
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Ok, I finished editing it so its ready.

My sensei is an NCP and a founder of the village that wil be based on sand.
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Kilala
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sounds cool. I guess me and your sand kids are gonna have fun. *pulls the arms off your teddy bear* Heeheeehee. :P
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Sunaarashi no jutsu [NJ]Sandstorm Jutsu
Description/Seals: [ram, hare, snake] By using these seals, you can create a sandstorm that surrounds the entire area and everyone in it, that makes the opponent or group of people unable to see while you are using the sand to see through giving you a somewhat good eyesight in battle.
Requirements: Sand:10 Wind: 8 Intelligence: 5
Cost: 5

Sabure Gouben No Jutsu [NJ] (Sand Pool Jutsu)
Seals: Dog, Ram, Snake, Ox
Description: Using the soil around you, you can create a knee-deep amount of sand around you that can be used to create a source of sand that can be controlled by your chackra by realesing chackra into it or else the sand used will be twice as difficult to control and will make you waist double the chackra when it's used in a jutsu. This is used as a source of sand for a sand jutsu and can be eventually as easy to control as your own sand.. The amount of sand you can create is increased through training. This sand can be mixed with your own so that you can control the sand better and keep it for another time.
Requirments: Sand: 20 Intelligence: 10
Cost: 12 +3 every post you make more (steadily rises as you create more sand.)

There you go
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Silver Wolf
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thanks.

Mes becoming a sand demon :P
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Silver Wolf
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OK, I've decided on using this thread as my request jutsu thread.

So....

Sunarsentama no Jutsu[NJ] Spiraling sand ball Jutsu
Description/Seals: [ram, hare, snake, ox] By using these seals, you can create a spiraling ball of sand that when making contact with a surface, creates a giant quicksand trap. This trap is special since it roatates at an extremely quick pace, making everything be drawn into it. Even without contact, this ball can draw in everything except the user. By feeding it chackra, it will absorb the chackra and not the user. Everything that gets sucked in ends up 5 feet underground. This jutsu stops after two posts.
Requirements: Sand:35 Wind: 45
Cost: 45 points and drains 5 points every turn from the user.
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