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Yon, Takumi; Hidden Valley
Topic Started: Apr 30 2007, 02:12 PM (91 Views)
Takumi
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The First Leo Harashiki of The New World Order of Enlightenment
Name: Yon, Takumi
Gender: Male
Age: Eight
Clan: Yon
Village: Hidden Valley
Personality: Takumi is a good boy. He won’t accept injustice, and he tries to solve conflicts peacefully. He has witnessed fighting, and even his father killing another person in combat, so he wants to prevent violence. Even so, he values the ability to defend himself and others, and so he trains quite often.

His father has though him pride, and he won’t feel ashamed over the fact that he has another pair of arms. He actually likes them, since they give him an advantage when fighting. This is part of who he is, and he wouldn’t change a bit. He has complete confidence in himself, and he often trusts others, too.

One of his hopes is that he won’t need to use his abilities as a shinobi, but he knows he will have to kill. He has cried over this fact, asking his father why, but he has accepted the fact as it is. Someday he will have to kill an enemy or more.

Appearance: Yon Takumis hair is dark red and points in many directions. His eyes are silver-colored. He wears a bandana at all times, and they are often blue or red, though he has a wide array of bandanas. He wears a blue sweater specifically designed for his four arms (like the rest of the Yon clan) and a pair of black pants. His equipment is stored in a dark red pouch strapped to his right leg.

Money: 100 Yen

Personal Status

Rank: Student
Chakra: 50


Mental:
Charisma: 6
Intellect: 10
Will-Power: 10

Physical:
Strength: 2
Stamina: 6
Agility: 3

Skills:
Ninjutsu: 5
Genjutsu: 0
Taijutsu: 2
Summoning: 0
Sealing: 4
Medical Practice: 0

Weapon Practice:
Sword Skill: 1
Axe/Hammer Skill: 0
Fan Skill: 0
Pole-arm Skill: 0
Instrument Skill: 0
Armor Skill: 0
Shield Skill: 0
Ninja Skill: 2

Jutsu Types:

Fire: 0
Water: 0
Earth: 0
Wind: 0
Dark: 5
Light: 0
Ice: 0
Thunder: 0
Sound: 0
Sand: 0
Plant: 0
Bloodline: 0


Known Jutsu

Ninjutsu

Smoke Vanish [NJ]
Description/Seals: [Snake] By forming your chakra into smoke, you can expel it from you body and use it as a cover for whatever it is you are doing.
Requirements: 5 Dark 5 Ninjutsu
Effect: Allows an easy hiding ability.
Cost: 3

Dispel
Description/Seals: [Tiger] As you perform the seal, any illusions that are weaker than your Intelligence and Genjutsu stat are destroyed and gotten rid of. This can only be used once per post.
Effect: Any Illusions that are weaker than your Intelligence + Genjutsu x.5 is dispelled.
Cost: 5

Replacement Jutsu
Description/Seals: [None] Moving at High Speeds you can move out of the way of an opponents physical attack and replace yourself with an object. You move so fast that it looks as if you had turned into that object.
Effect: None
Cost: 10

Genjutsu
None

Taijutsu

Diving Falcon Strike
Description/Seals: [None] This technique is very powerful and can easily fracture a bone if an opponent does not defend properly. The user must have his back facing the opponent and flip backwards, while spinning in the air so that he lands with his heal smashing into the opponent. The flip that is performed is known as a 'flair' and it is when you start off doing a back flip or front flip, and land as if you had done the other.
Effect: Basic Taijutsu Attack
Cost: 0

Medical Jutsu
None

Summoning Jutsu
None

Weapon Jutsu
None

Bloodline Limit

Growth of Four Arms
Description: The special thing about this clan, is each and every member is born with two extra arms underneath their normal ones. This allows them to hold more things, perform more Jutus's, and climb things easier. Although, this also can cause difficulty in swimming, and just gives the target something else to.. well target.
Effect: Allows one to wield more weapons, perform two Jutus's at once, and perform special Jutsu's.
Requirements: None
Cost: None

Seal Requirements
Description: [None] Having Four arms allows you to perform two seals at once. Meaning, starting at 1 sealing will allow you to perform Jutsu's that require two seals. So every three Sealing you have, allows you to perform two more hand seals.
Effect: Every Three Sealing Skill allows two hand seals.
Requirements: Intelligence- 10
Cost: None

Abilities
None

Equipment/Items

Weapon Inventory

Kunai X10
Description: Light Throwing Daggers
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: Iron

Throwing Stars X10
Description: Projectiles with sharp edges all around.
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: Iron

Wakizashi
Description: A small version of a katana. Wakizashi
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: Iron

(You may have a light iron-medium Wood weapon. You get an Iron version of it after you graduate.)I thought that this meant that I could have a weapon in addition to the Kunai and Throwing Stars. If this is not correct, I will remove the wakizashi from my profile.

Armor/Clothing
Normal Clothing
Description: The normal Clothes the character wore in the description.
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: None

Items
None

History

Takumi was born in a wood somewhere, but his parents have never said where this wood was, neither when he was born, so he only knows vaguely how old he is. His parents told him, at the age of five, that he would be told when he was born when he turned 12. This is a day he is looking forward to. His parents have taught him Ninjutsu since he was six, and learned him a technique to cover his actions or as a distraction to get away. They also taught him a little bit of Taijutsu, since he would be certain to stumble across hand-to-hand-combat. This has given him a basic knowledge on the fighting techniques of the ninja.

His father always looked after him, and trained with him every day, but Takumi was a slow learner. He didn’t learn his first technique well before a year had passed, but then he caught up on it. Because of this episode where he learned faster, he trains at almost every opportunity he has, because he want to become better and stronger.

He was taught at home for 2 years, and then passed on to the Academy.


I would appreciate any feedback on my character, especially from the mods and admin, but everyone can reply.
I hope I have gotten it right.
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Shin Draven
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Expand on your history, personality, and history a bit. Remember if you want a bloodline, then you should work a little harder.
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I made a new post about my edited character. Is this OK?




Name: Yon, Takumi
Gender: Male
Age: Eight
Clan: Yon
Village: Hidden Valley
Personality: Takumi is a good boy. He won’t accept injustice, and he tries to solve conflicts peacefully. He has witnessed fighting, and even his father killing another person in combat, so he wants to prevent violence. Even so, he values the ability to defend himself and others, and so he trains quite often. He tries to come up with a compromise to all situations, but he is cold-headed, and knows when there is no chance of an agreement. He doesn’t like violence, but knows that it may be used as a necessary means to achieve a goal.

His father has though him pride, and he won’t feel ashamed over the fact that he has another pair of arms. He actually likes them, since they give him an advantage when fighting. This is part of who he is, and he wouldn’t change a bit. He has complete confidence in himself, and he often trusts others, too. He has been quite isolated from other children, but he has had contact with other adults. He might come with some joking comments above his age, but he doesn’t really understand them.

One of his hopes is that he won’t need to use his abilities as a shinobi, but he knows he will have to kill. He has cried over this fact, asking his father why, but he has accepted the fact as it is. Someday he will have to kill an enemy or more. This is something he knows will come, but he already has a resistance towards that day. He believes that every human is worth the same, but also that everyone is unique.

Appearance: Yon Takumis hair is dark red and points in many directions. His eyes are silver-colored. He wears a bandana at all times, and they are often blue or red, though he has a wide array of bandanas. He wears a blue sweater specifically designed for his four arms (like the rest of the Yon clan) and a pair of black pants. His equipment is stored in a dark red pouch strapped to his right leg.

Money: 100 Yen

Personal Status

Rank: Student
Chakra: 50


Mental:
Charisma: 6
Intellect: 10
Will-Power: 10

Physical:
Strength: 2
Stamina: 6
Agility: 3

Skills:
Ninjutsu: 5
Genjutsu: 0
Taijutsu: 2
Summoning: 0
Sealing: 4
Medical Practice: 0

Weapon Practice:
Sword Skill: 1
Axe/Hammer Skill: 0
Fan Skill: 0
Pole-arm Skill: 0
Instrument Skill: 0
Armor Skill: 0
Shield Skill: 0
Ninja Skill: 2

Jutsu Types:

Fire: 0
Water: 0
Earth: 0
Wind: 0
Dark: 5
Light: 0
Ice: 0
Thunder: 0
Sound: 0
Sand: 0
Plant: 0
Bloodline: 0


Known Jutsu

Ninjutsu

Smoke Vanish [NJ]
Description/Seals: [Snake] By forming your chakra into smoke, you can expel it from you body and use it as a cover for whatever it is you are doing.
Requirements: 5 Dark 5 Ninjutsu
Effect: Allows an easy hiding ability.
Cost: 3

Dispel
Description/Seals: [Tiger] As you perform the seal, any illusions that are weaker than your Intelligence and Genjutsu stat are destroyed and gotten rid of. This can only be used once per post.
Effect: Any Illusions that are weaker than your Intelligence + Genjutsu x.5 is dispelled.
Cost: 5

Genjutsu
None

Taijutsu

Diving Falcon Strike
Description/Seals: [None] This technique is very powerful and can easily fracture a bone if an opponent does not defend properly. The user must have his back facing the opponent and flip backwards, while spinning in the air so that he lands with his heal smashing into the opponent. The flip that is performed is known as a 'flair' and it is when you start off doing a back flip or front flip, and land as if you had done the other.
Effect: Basic Taijutsu Attack
Cost: 0

Medical Jutsu
None

Summoning Jutsu
None

Weapon Jutsu
None

Bloodline Limit

Growth of Four Arms
Description: The special thing about this clan, is each and every member is born with two extra arms underneath their normal ones. This allows them to hold more things, perform more Jutus's, and climb things easier. Although, this also can cause difficulty in swimming, and just gives the target something else to.. well target.
Effect: Allows one to wield more weapons, perform two Jutus's at once, and perform special Jutsu's.
Requirements: None
Cost: None

Seal Requirements
Description: [None] Having Four arms allows you to perform two seals at once. Meaning, starting at 1 sealing will allow you to perform Jutsu's that require two seals. So every three Sealing you have, allows you to perform two more hand seals.
Effect: Every Three Sealing Skill allows two hand seals.
Requirements: Intelligence- 10
Cost: None

Abilities
None

Equipment/Items

Weapon Inventory

Kunai X10
Description: Light Throwing Daggers
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: Iron

Throwing Stars X10
Description: Projectiles with sharp edges all around.
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: Iron

Wakizashi
Description: A small version of a katana. Wakizashi
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: Wood


Armor/Clothing
Normal Clothing
Description: The normal Clothes the character wore in the description.
Effect: None
Weight: Light
Type: None

Items
None

History

Takumi was born in a wood somewhere, but his parents have never said where this wood was, neither when he was born, so he only knows vaguely how old he is. His parents told him, at the age of five, that he would be told when he was born when he turned 12. This is a day he is looking forward to. His parents have taught him Ninjutsu since he was six, and learned him a technique to cover his actions or as a distraction to get away. They also taught him a little bit of Taijutsu, since he would be certain to stumble across hand-to-hand-combat. This has given him a basic knowledge on the fighting techniques of the ninja.

His father always looked after him, and trained with him every day, but Takumi was a slow learner. He didn’t learn his first technique well before a year had passed, but then he caught up on it. Because of this episode where he learned faster, he trains at almost every opportunity he has, because he wants to become better and stronger. He knew from the age of seven that his father would go off on a mission for a long time, but when his father did so, he became sad. He had always been used to having his father at his side to help him, and now he had to figure out things all alone. That was what he thought, at least. He didn’t consider his mother to be a source of information and training-advice, but she helped him while his father was gone.

He found a favourite place to train, in a forest near his home, and soon he had made several cuts into a nearby tree. When his mother came for him that evening, she saw that he had damaged a tree, and she told him to keep the trees healthy. The next morning, she followed him out to the same place, and he found that there was placed a wooden barrel there. “Did you set this up, mom?” he asked her. She had asked a man in the valley to make the barrel for training purposes, and it was made of 20 cm thick wood, and it was filled with rocks and sand to keep it in place.

Takumi was quite excited about this, and with the help of his mother he learned parts of basic taijutsu. He practiced on the barrel and he sparred with his mother. She was far better than him, but she was also kinder than his father when it came to training. His father had trained him hard, almost so hard that he wanted to run away, but his mother trained him in a way that made him want to train. This helped enormously on his self-esteem, and he trained every single day. He was even training when his father came home from his mission.

The mission his father had done for the village had taken about six months. Takumi was overjoyed when he saw his father again. He ran to his father at first sight of him, and hugged him hard and long. (Seeing someone from the Yon clan hug each other is quite fun, Eight arms!) His fathers return was celebrated with sake, but Takumi wasn’t old enough to drink, so he drank water instead. The next morning was exciting for Takumi, since he had gotten his father to promise to train with him. His father was awoken most brutally, by a so jumping onto him at 4 AM. “I wanna train,” Takumi said, and his father was soon ready to come with him.

During his father’s mission, he had learned a new technique that didn’t take too much skill, but could prove useful to the sharp-minded. This was the “Smoke Vanish-”technique. He showed his son how to do it, and supervised his training on this jutsu all day. When he came home that evening, Takumi was asleep, and his father had been bearing him home. He practiced the new jutsu for several days in succession, and got better at it. While training his jutsu, he also trained a little in taijutsu and the other jutsu he had learned. When he came home after an exhausting day with training, his mother told him that he was going to the academy in the hidden valley.


Now I have the amount of jutsus I can have.
Done the Wood weapon-thingy.
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It's all fine, but you have to get rid of one of your jutsu. Unless you make your intellect 12 instead of 10.
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Sorry, I'll edit it.
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Shin Draven
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The weapon for ninja training is suppose to be wood, light. not iron light.
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Done.
I'm soo bad at this (well, not that bad, I've done somewhat the same before.)
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It has a few grammatical errors, but they aren't serious.Accepted.
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Thanks ;)
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