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| Tweet Topic Started: Jul 15 2007, 08:09 PM (57 Views) | |
| NanoSong | Jul 15 2007, 08:09 PM Post #1 |
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Name: Tsu Myou Thread Type: Jutsu learning Link to your Character Sheet: In the Sig Link to Thread: Shadow of a Doubt Summary Tsu, by her sensei, was forced to teach a class about ninjutsu. However, in the end, it seemed Tsu learned a little more than the students did. Stats you Used Intellect Ninjutsu Learn/Obtain anything? Name: Shadow Web Description: [Rat, Boar, Dog, Snake] Though considered the finishing move of Tsu Myou, it is actually a more supplemental technique. The user's shadow darkens and stretches outward in a circular web-like design. The radius is 1ft per 1 Dark. It then becomes stationary. Any ground under the shadow cannot be seen. While standing on the "web", the user's agility and increases by 25% of the Dark stat. The user senses the location of all standing on the "web". Also, all techniques that require a shadow can be used through the web, making them happen instantly if the opponent is standing on it. If the user leaves the radius of the web, it dissapears and becomes their normal shadow again. Requirements: Dark 15 Ninjutsu 20 Cost: 20 |
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| Lucifer | Jul 15 2007, 08:12 PM Post #2 |
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I got this one love niggas. EDIT: Cloud, your censors are killing me! |
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| Lucifer | Jul 15 2007, 08:31 PM Post #3 |
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Grammar - 2. Your grammar is good; though for dialogue, end most of it with a comma if an action takes place directly after it. EX: "You're a dick," said Xera as she took a step towards Rick. Effort - 2. Double the paragraph minimum for a move training. Enough said about effort. Plot Development - 1. It was a good read, but it's not your fault almost every move training is a bore to read. You were close to a 2, but I like some more action and a plot, but that's just me. The thread was fine. Consistency - 2. The story had a flow, and the story didn't jump from place to place suddenly. Climax - 1. Same reason as the Plot Development scoring. There was lack of an awesome climax, but it's not the type of thread to have a good one. Total = 8. |
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| NanoSong | Jul 15 2007, 08:34 PM Post #4 |
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Intellect- 3 Ninjutsu- 5 Thanks. :D |
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| Lucifer | Jul 15 2007, 08:39 PM Post #5 |
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