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Son Of War
Topic Started: Sep 18 2007, 07:16 AM (52 Views)
T@Z
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HA-HA!
Name: Yuugo Amedare
Thread Type: Mission
Link to your Character Sheet: Sig
Link to Thread: Son of War

Summary
Took Alex Uzumaki to Bide

Stats you Used
Water
Bloodline

Learn/Obtain anything?
Utility Belt
Description: A simple belt with pouches made especially for bottles of water.
Effect: Carries 6 water bottles, 3 on each side.
Weight: Light
Type: None

Water Bottles (6)
Description: Bottles of water that refreshes and replenishes Amedare’s ability for water jutsu. Can sometimes be used to procreate water jutsus if there is no water around.
Effect: makes water if there is none, produces jutsu that requires 5 in water stat.
Weight: Light
Type: None

(Both were already approved by Will)
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Apocalypse (Lv4)
Items are okay, no real practical use other than for Water Ninjutsu. Which, what would stop someone from having a pot to carry around with water?

Anyway.

- Grammar- 1
- Effort- 2
- Plot Development 3
- Closing- 1
- Climax- 2

9

LOTS of type-os, spelling errors and a few grammatical issues. Using abbreviations without closing them off with a period... you did the whole 'seh' thing when you meant she as well as spelled Silhouette wrong a few times.

Plot was awesome, your posts were long and full... but the threads ending seemed rushed.
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HA-HA!
It was rushed. XD

thanks.

Ill fix myself.

Water - 5
Bloodline - 4
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