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Herr CJA
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Aug 3 2008, 07:18 PM
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Name of the film: The Fifth Wall
The tone of the film: artsy. ooooo.
You can read the current script (though it might make no sense) here:
Spoiler: click to toggle [DRAFT 6]
Hear hum of television set Hear video tape being inserted to VCR See news reporter talking
A: Officials are uncertain of how the boy commited suicide. There is, however, a big gash between his neck and stomache, most likely made by some sort of knife or axe. No knives or axes were found at the scene. His friend arrived minutes later, claiming he was with him when he commited suicide.
Zoom out to see huge pile of videotapes Videotapes represent man trying to become God
Slowly fade into cross. 4/4 candles lit.
Man takes out videotape of friend's suicide, address marked on top. Transition from videotape to friend's house.
Man enters closet FLASH to see cuts on the walls Man sees door beneath him, with a ladder.
-REWIND to childhood- A: what was that? B: [heavily breathing] A: Are you going to talk about this? B: I just saw... four walls. Nn..nothing else. A: So I just had a dream? Is that it? WHATS WRONG WITH YOU? A: YOU WERE with me, DON'T LIE! -END REWIND-
Man climbs down ladder. Enters cave.
Slowly fade into cross. 3/4 candles lit.
Walks through cave with difficulty
Reaches opening Sees underground railroad.
Walks to the middle. Bright lights come up, sillhouette pulls man to side. Sillhouette dissapears, train leaves.
Walks to the side, sees opening. Walks through opening, finds mechinaical staircase winding up, with no end.
Slowly fade into cross. 2/4 candles lit.
Man walks up, starts running, fear of something chasing him. Sees gifts surrounding him as he runs up.
Man tries to reach for gift, trips because of the moving mechanical staircase (MACHINE BREAKING MAN) Falls, hits ground, ground begins to break to reveal magma.
FADE TO SCENE of childhood with friend, trying to escape the magma, the children find a ladder to leads them away from the magma. FADE BACK
Man tries to find ladder, finds it, tries to climb, but it breaks due to rust. Man keeps trying to climb wall. Struggles, but he makes it to the opening. Runs through the opening back to the closet.
Shuts metal lid, falls down. BLACK OUT
Fade in to man, stuck in closet. There is no door, just him.
-REWIND to childhood- B: I can't find it! A: What? B: The door! We're trapped! A: Grab the axe, smash the wall, we'll get out. B: But theres going to be more walls to break. A: What do you see? I see four walls, and we can break those damn four walls. -END REWIND-
He sees an axe on the ground, tries to break the walls. (MAN BREAKING GOD)
Slowly fade into cross. 1/4 candles lit.
-REWIND to childhood- B: I can't break them! A: There's only one way. B: No. -END REWIND-
Sees reflection of himself, breaks the reflection. Exits the closet without an axe, the marks are gone, and the lid opens to reveal just hard rock.
Slowly fade into cross. 0/4 candles lit. Reveal image to the main character.
Please, criticize, give feedback, etc. Should I work with this idea, or just scratch the whole project?
If I go through with this, I'll need the voices of: news reporter young boy
Wrote this script because I was bored out of my mind. Thought it turned out pretty good. It'll be either an amazing film, or an utter disaster.
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