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| Bob's Misguided attempt to write stuff; LEAVE FEEDBACK FOR THE LOVE OF GOD! | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Jun 22 2006, 02:12 AM (1,794 Views) | |
| Bob 121 | Jun 22 2006, 02:12 AM Post #1 |
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Yeah. I suppose that the old thing got deleted so I'm making this thread. I'm not going to post any of my story yet but it's much like the one that I had posted earlier only I've kinda changed it. (Most of you probably don't have a clue what I'm talking about anyway.) Anyway I think that it's going to be pretty good but I want to make sure I have a good product before I post so it may be a little bit before I post anything. Another thing is that I don't have a name picked out so if you guys want to try to pick something once I unveil some of the story then you can. |
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| PathToTheDusk | Jun 22 2006, 01:31 PM Post #2 |
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fal'Cie Omega
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I'll try my best and the fact you're willing to put your ideas out there is really bold i could never write down my ideas or dreams. |
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| Bob 121 | Jun 23 2006, 12:24 AM Post #3 |
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Well, its not that bold. I mean, this is just a forum. It isn't like someone can track me down in the real world and hit me over the head with a baseball bat just because they didn't like my story.... but thanks anyway. I get what you mean. |
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| Bob 121 | Jun 25 2006, 10:00 PM Post #4 |
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REMOVED: BLAM!!! |
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| Hlfranklin | Jun 25 2006, 10:32 PM Post #5 |
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It's real good bob, keep it a coming, as for errors i only see a few, if any.
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| Bob 121 | Jun 26 2006, 11:57 AM Post #6 |
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Thanks. |
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| Bob 121 | Jul 7 2006, 05:14 PM Post #7 |
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REMOVED: BLAM!! |
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| Specialist290 | Jul 8 2006, 11:31 AM Post #8 |
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Very impressive writing
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| Bob 121 | Jul 8 2006, 12:12 PM Post #9 |
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Thanks. |
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| Bob 121 | Jul 13 2006, 12:44 PM Post #10 |
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Hey, guys. I think I've come up with a good title for my story. My idea was to title it Proditio which is latin for something that's going to play a big role throughout the plot. Whaddya think? |
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| Specialist290 | Aug 9 2006, 03:50 PM Post #11 |
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A bit late on the feedback, but yeah, sounds like a good idea. |
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| Bob 121 | Aug 12 2006, 12:56 AM Post #12 |
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Hey, no problem I appreciate the feeback. Sorry I havn't been posting any new chapters lately, I've been taking a while to write but Chapter three should be done soon. |
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| Bob 121 | Aug 19 2006, 12:23 PM Post #13 |
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REMOVED: BLAM!! |
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| Specialist290 | Aug 19 2006, 06:16 PM Post #14 |
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Most interesting. I'm starting to wonder about the purpose of the mission myself. Only mistake I noticed is right there at the very tail end. You'd probably want to combine those two sentences into one and use a comma where the first period is. |
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| Bob 121 | Aug 20 2006, 01:34 PM Post #15 |
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Ahh, didn't catch that. Good one. Thanks! |
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| Bob 121 | Aug 21 2006, 04:22 PM Post #16 |
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By the way, do you know what the title means? |
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| Specialist290 | Aug 23 2006, 12:47 PM Post #17 |
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Not really. I know a couple of Latin words, but "Proditio" unfortunately isn't one of them. |
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| Bob 121 | Aug 23 2006, 04:55 PM Post #18 |
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Well, a wiki search turns up Christian Death but that's some weird rock group. Proditio means Betrayal or traitor in Latin so there ya go! You learned something today! YAY!
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| Bob 121 | Feb 11 2007, 01:17 AM Post #19 |
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Moved post to page 3 |
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| PathToTheDusk | Feb 14 2007, 05:52 PM Post #20 |
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Bob i must admit that your story is AWESOME!!!!!!!!. I was totally drawn into it and blown away at the same time, but what really did it for me was when i began to read it aloud. When i read it aloud it was as if i were in the story and it really came to life. I am eagerly awaiting the arrival of the next chapter, keep up the excellent work!!!.
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It's real good bob, keep it a coming, as for errors i only see a few, if any.


10:51 AM Jul 11