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Bob's Misguided attempt to write stuff; LEAVE FEEDBACK FOR THE LOVE OF GOD!
Topic Started: Jun 22 2006, 02:12 AM (1,792 Views)
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Yeah. I suppose that the old thing got deleted so I'm making this thread. I'm not going to post any of my story yet but it's much like the one that I had posted earlier only I've kinda changed it. (Most of you probably don't have a clue what I'm talking about anyway.) Anyway I think that it's going to be pretty good but I want to make sure I have a good product before I post so it may be a little bit before I post anything. Another thing is that I don't have a name picked out so if you guys want to try to pick something once I unveil some of the story then you can.
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I'll try my best and the fact you're willing to put your ideas out there is really bold i could never write down my ideas or dreams.
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Jun 22 2006, 12:31 PM
I'll try my best and the fact you're willing to put your ideas out there is really bold i could never write down my ideas or dreams.

Well, its not that bold. I mean, this is just a forum. It isn't like someone can track me down in the real world and hit me over the head with a baseball bat just because they didn't like my story.... but thanks anyway. I get what you mean.
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:thumbsup: It's real good bob, keep it a coming, as for errors i only see a few, if any.
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Thanks.
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Very impressive writing :thumbsup:
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Very impressive writing :thumbsup:

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Hey, guys. I think I've come up with a good title for my story. My idea was to title it Proditio which is latin for something that's going to play a big role throughout the plot. Whaddya think?
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A bit late on the feedback, but yeah, sounds like a good idea.
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Aug 9 2006, 02:50 PM
A bit late on the feedback, but yeah, sounds like a good idea.

Hey, no problem I appreciate the feeback. Sorry I havn't been posting any new chapters lately, I've been taking a while to write but Chapter three should be done soon.
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Most interesting. I'm starting to wonder about the purpose of the mission myself.

Only mistake I noticed is right there at the very tail end. You'd probably want to combine those two sentences into one and use a comma where the first period is.
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Aug 19 2006, 05:16 PM
Most interesting. I'm starting to wonder about the purpose of the mission myself.

Only mistake I noticed is right there at the very tail end. You'd probably want to combine those two sentences into one and use a comma where the first period is.

Ahh, didn't catch that. Good one. Thanks!
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By the way, do you know what the title means?
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Not really. I know a couple of Latin words, but "Proditio" unfortunately isn't one of them.
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Not really. I know a couple of Latin words, but "Proditio" unfortunately isn't one of them.

Well, a wiki search turns up Christian Death but that's some weird rock group. Proditio means Betrayal or traitor in Latin so there ya go! You learned something today! YAY! :)
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Bob i must admit that your story is AWESOME!!!!!!!!. I was totally drawn into it and blown away at the same time, but what really did it for me was when i began to read it aloud. When i read it aloud it was as if i were in the story and it really came to life. I am eagerly awaiting the arrival of the next chapter, keep up the excellent work!!!. :thumbsup:
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