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| Euro! | Feb 8 2009, 12:12 AM Post #1 |
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[dohtml] <TABLE borderColor=#ffffff cellSpacing=1 cellPadding=1 align=center bgColor=#000000 border=1> <TBODY><TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Euro| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR> <TD> <P align=center> </P></FONT></P> <P align=center> <TABLE borderColor=#ffffff cellSpacing=1 cellPadding=1 bgColor=#000000 border=1> <TBODY> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Theme Music| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD align=middle> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> Main Theme: Pleased To Meet You - Wolfmother <br> Calm Theme: Gives You Hell - The All-American Rejects <br> Fight Theme: Brianstorm - The Arctic Monkeys <br> Battle Theme: Lets Get It Started - Black Eyed Peas <br> Epic Battle Theme: I Need Speed - Capone <br> Determined Theme: All I Ever Wanted - Basshunter <br> Heroic Theme: Thunderbirds Are Go - Busted <br> Messing About Theme: Jerk It Out - Caesars <br> Epic Theme: Halo 2 Theme - Mjolnir Mix </FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE></P></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Personal Information| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Name:</i></b> Richard 'Dick' Joseph Grayson <br> <b><i>Alias:</i></b> Nightwing <br> <b><i>Race:</i></b> Human <br> <b><i>Gender:</i></b> Male <br> <b><i>Age:</i></b> 18 <br> <b><i>Height:</i></b> 5ft 10in <br> <b><i>Weight:</i></b> 180lbs <br> <b><i>Hair:</i></b> Black <br> <b><i>Eyes:</i></b> Brown <br> <b><i>Alignment:</i></b> Chaotic Good <br> <b><i>Personality:</i></b> Dick has become a hugely vengeful young man since his parents' murder. He blames the whole of Gotham's underbelly for this and takes out his fury on any drug dealer or crook to come his way. When out of his Nightwing Persona, and wearing the mask of Dick Grayson, he is a fairly amiable young man, but a loner by nature. He is kind enough, but tries not to make friends. <br> <b><i>Team:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Secret Origin:</i></b> Trained: -5% Fighting & Knowledge Skills, +5% Items of Power <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Statistics| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Total Experience Gained:</i></b> Info <br> <b><i>Experience Points Left To Use:</i></b> 190 <br> <b><i>Experience Points Used:</i></b> 5560 <br><br> <b><i>Strength:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Agility:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Accuracy:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Durability:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Will Power:</i></b> 3 <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Powers| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>None</i></b> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Skills| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Acrobatics, Non Powered lvl 10:</i></b> Having been trained in the Circus from a very young age, Dick is an excellent Acrobat, able to perform incredible feats of acrobatics seemingly seamlessly. He uses this in his vigilante actions to gain an advantage over his opponents, using his skills to avoid blows and disorientate his opponent. He is known for being the only human to be able to perform the triple back flip.- 95xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Fighting Skills lvl 5:</i></b> Having taken to the life of a vigilante, beating criminals to a pulp each night in revenge for his parents, Dick has had to learn how to fight quickly. Having started out with receiving as good as he gave, he swiftly began to use tricks learnt from mobsters or drug dealers, and slowly his own injuries began to become fewer and fewer. Although he is by no means the perfect brawler, he can defeat many opponents in a fist fight. - 190xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Stealth lvl 10:</i></b> Dick has always been good at getting into places unseen, his lithe body seems adept at worming its way into shadows and gaps. He never really used this skill before, apart from sneaking out of the house after dark to play with his friends when he was younger, friends he alienated after his parents' funeral. Now he uses it to sneak out of the orphanage, to sneak into criminal hideouts, immediately prior to beating them to pulps. - 142xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>IQ lvl 5:</i></b> Whilst not the sharpest knife in the drawer, Dick is not dumb by any stretch of the imagination. He easily smarter than his orphanage counter-parts although doesn't show off with it, preferring to remain below the radar. - 100xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Theivery lvl 5:</i></b> Despite his hatred for criminals and those who prey on the innocent, Dick sees no problem in stealing from those who stole and often does so to be able to give to those who were stolen from. He also does the same around the orphanage as a way of punishing the many bullies around the establishment, in fact, he has become proficient enough to have picked the pocket of many who can afford it. - 300xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Tracking:</i></b> Dick has been forced to trail several criminals whom he is determined to bring to justice, in his own way. From these experiences, he has picked up a rudimentary skill to track those who seek to elude him in his attacks on crime. Although he doesn't put it into practice often, he appreciates the fact that it could be useful in the future. - 190xp </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Challenges| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Challenge: Blames Others</i></b> Dick has laid the blame for his Parent's Murder at the feet of every criminal in Gotham. He seeks to bring about an end to crime by brutally beating every criminal in his path, taking out the low level enforcers until he can work his way up to the bosses. - 250xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Compulsion to Stick Up For the Underdog</i></b> Dick has a deep rooted hatred for Bullies, only exacerbated by the murder of his parents. He furiously stands up for their targets and refuses to back down, until justice is found. - 200xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Guilty Conscience</i></b> Dick believes that if he had practised his vigilantism before his parents murder then he might have been able to save them, by fighting their murderer. Although everyone he has ever known has tried to convince him otherwise, he believes, he knows, that if he had been stronger then he would have been able to defend them. - 300xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Medium Deadly Enemies</i></b> Dick has been fighting criminals of one sort or another since he first decided to become a force for his own version of justice, vengeance. He attacks indiscriminately and takes a sense of victory from disrupting the machinations of the Mob. For this reason, he is hunted by enforcers and bent cops alike. - 400xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Major Haunted past</i></b> Dick's driving force is his memory of his parents, and his pure, unrestrained fury at their murder. He has never, and will never, forget their faces as they bled to death in the Narrows of Gotham, no one came to help, as no one would ever come to help two dying people, especially in the Narrows. Jake's fury at this injustice forces him to become someone who will step in to help. But the second cause of his hatred was his introduction into the Narrows Orphanage which exposed him to crime every day. Kids knifed each other in the hallways and no one spoke up. The experience will remain with him for his whole life. - 600xp </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Inventory| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Occupation:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Money:</i></b> 2,000$ <br> <b><i>Items:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Weapons:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Armour:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Transport:</i></b> None <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Origin| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD align=middle> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> Richard Grayson was born to Jack and Maria Grayson at Gotham General Hospital on the seventeenth of March Nineteen Ninety. The pair were acrobats and worked for the Gotham Circus which paid for their small apartment in the Narrows. It wasn't the perfect job, but they loved it. Unknown to his family, however, Jack occasionally moonlighted as a low level enforcer for the Mob to supplement their income, although he never enjoyed it. <br> When Dick was thirteen, two weeks before his birthday, Frank walked out of a job when one of his 'colleagues' shot dead a woman and two children, even calling the police before the man could escape. The man was tried but found not guilty, it was then that Jack came clean to his wife and son about what he had done, although he assured her that he had never hurt anyone. Dick was shaken by the news, although his grades never faltered and he continued to be an exceptional student. His mother and father were his parents and his closest friends, they didn't lie. To find that his father had done so about the extra income he was bringing into the family was disturbing, but he loved him nonetheless. <br> But the Mob didn't forget, and the climax came on Dick's birthday when his parents managed to find enough money to take him to see a film, the Grey Ghost. Walking through an alley to the bus station, two men stopped in a car, and without hesitation shot both Dick's mother and father, he was only protected by their bodies falling across him and as the men left, called for help. None came, until a passing patrol car stopped and took Dick and his parents to Gotham General as fast as possible. But by then it was too late. Jack Grayson died from internal bleeding which took some time to kill him, whilst Maria died instantly from a shot to the heart. Dick would never get over his parents' brutal murder, nor would he ever forgive what had been done to him. <br> He was sent to an Orphanage after the funeral, since he had no other family, the apartment and possessions sold and the proceeds placed in a trust fund for him when he reached 21. Almost as soon as he entered the place he knew that he had to get out. The staff couldn't control the children, and the Narrows wasn't famed for its good citizens. He learnt the hard way, being beaten up plenty of times before he decided to defend himself. He stole from the bullies and gave to the bullied, refusing to lie down and die. He focused his fury into learning to fight the bullies and eventually they gave him wide berth, unless they came in great enough numbers that they thought they could take him down. <br> By the time Dick was sixteen, he knew how to handle himself. He knew that to take out a kid with a knife, you distracted him and kicked him hard in the groin. He knew that the best way to stop a crowd of kids was to scare them shitless before they came close. He knew how to avoid their gangs, and when to steal their stuff. In short, Dick learnt how to survive in the Orphanage. He had nothing to lose, so he picked on bigger prey, sneaking out of the orphanage at night and attacking drug dealers, coyotes, theives, criminals, beating them as badly as he could to try to satisfy his rage, but it didn't abate, and nor did his thirst to see them suffer for what they had done to him. Inspired by Urban Myths of a Bat who haunted Gotham at night, Dick made more and more night-time excursions, learning from his mistakes and taking his revenge on criminals until the Mob got involved. Dick knew they would find out about his deeds eventually, and he wasn't afraid of dying, they had already taken his life away. So he took to the rooftops each night, using the skills he taught himself, in the desire to beat some light into the underworld. </FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE> [/dohtml] |
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| Jon | Feb 8 2009, 09:32 PM Post #2 |
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First of all... Your math. Stealth with a 5% discount costs 143 XP/lvl, not 142 XP/lvl. You round off, now down, so 142,5 becomes 143. And your usage adds up to 5520 XP, with the 143 XP/lvl for Stealth. Then... your origin... Just summing up 3 differences from Batman's origin here. That's the ONLY 3 differences I can find from Batman's origin. - Parents weren't rich, but were poor acrobats, the father moonlighting as a low level enforcer for the mob. - After the death of his parents, he was taken to an orphanage in the Narrows where he grew up and learned to fight and defend himself. - Inspired by myths of Batman, he started going out and fighting crime. That about right? Hell, you even used the thing with his parents being shot after exiting a cinema... having watched the Grey Ghost. Which I'm pretty sure was the movie that the Waynes went to see in the 90'es Batman cartoon. So, in short, about your origin: Redo it. It's simply too much like a carbon copy of Batman's. Try making it a bit more original, eh? Even if it is Nightwing... just do that, would you? |
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| Euro! | Feb 21 2009, 04:53 PM Post #3 |
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Hope this is a bit better, ![]() 15/03/09 - Everybody loves a dark character ^^ or I think so because everyone loves to see them redeem themselves. I think the guilty conscience should be a bit better now, hopefully. ^^[dohtml] <TABLE borderColor=#ffffff cellSpacing=1 cellPadding=1 align=center bgColor=#000000 border=1> <TBODY><TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Euro!| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR> <TD> <P align=center>< ></P></FONT></P> <P align=center> <TABLE borderColor=#ffffff cellSpacing=1 cellPadding=1 bgColor=#000000 border=1> <TBODY> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Theme Music| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD align=middle> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> Main Theme: Pleased To Meet You - Wolfmother <br> Calm Theme: Gives You Hell - The All-American Rejects <br> Fight Theme: Brianstorm - The Arctic Monkeys <br> Battle Theme: Lets Get It Started - Black Eyed Peas <br> Epic Battle Theme: I Need Speed - Capone <br> Determined Theme: All I Ever Wanted - Basshunter <br> Heroic Theme: Thunderbirds Are Go - Busted <br> Messing About Theme: Jerk It Out - Caesars <br> Epic Theme: Halo 2 Theme - Mjolnir Mix </FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE></P></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Personal Information| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Name:</i></b> Richard 'Dick' Joseph Grayson <br> <b><i>Alias:</i></b> Nightwing <br> <b><i>Race:</i></b> Human <br> <b><i>Gender:</i></b> Male <br> <b><i>Age:</i></b> 18 <br> <b><i>Height:</i></b> 5ft 10 <br> <b><i>Weight:</i></b> 180lbs <br> <b><i>Hair:</i></b> Black <br> <b><i>Eyes:</i></b> Brown <br> <b><i>Alignment:</i></b> Chaotic Good <br> <b><i>Personality:</i></b> Dick has become a hugely vengeful young man since his parents' murder. He blames the whole of Gotham's underbelly for this and takes out his fury on any drug dealer or crook to come his way. When out of his Nightwing Persona, and wearing the mask of Dick Grayson, he is a fairly amiable young man, but a loner by nature. He is kind enough, but tries not to make friends. <br> <b><i>Team:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Secret Origin:</i></b> Trained: -5% Fighting & Knowledge Skills, +5% Items of Power <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Statistics| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Total Experience Gained:</i></b> Info <br> <b><i>Experience Points Left To Use:</i></b> 30 <br> <b><i>Experience Points Used:</i></b> 6820 <br><br> <b><i>Strength:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Agility:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Accuracy:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Durability:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Will Power:</i></b> 3 <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Powers| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <br><P align=center><b>None</b> <br><br><br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Skills| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Acrobatics, Non Powered lvl 10:</i></b> Having been trained in the Circus from a very young age, Dick is an excellent Acrobat, able to perform incredible feats of acrobatics seemingly seamlessly. He uses this in his vigilante actions to gain an advantage over his opponents, using his skills to avoid blows and disorientate his opponent. He is known for being the only human to be able to perform the triple back flip.- 95xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Fighting Skills lvl 10:</i></b> Having taken to the life of a vigilante, beating criminals to a pulp each night in revenge for his parents, Dick has had to learn how to fight quickly. Having started out with receiving as good as he gave, he swiftly began to use tricks learnt from mobsters or drug dealers, and slowly his own injuries began to become fewer and fewer. He is almost the perfect brawler and can defeat many opponents in a fist fight. - 190xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Stealth lvl 10:</i></b> Dick has always been good at getting into places unseen, his lithe body seems adept at worming its way into shadows and gaps. He never really used this skill before, apart from sneaking out of the house after dark to play with his friends when he was younger, friends he alienated after his parents' funeral. Now he uses it to sneak out of the orphanage, to sneak into criminal hideouts, immediately prior to beating them to pulps. - 143xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>IQ lvl 5:</i></b> Whilst not the sharpest knife in the drawer, Dick is not dumb by any stretch of the imagination. He easily smarter than his orphanage counter-parts although doesn't show off with it, preferring to remain below the radar. - 100xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Theivery lvl 6:</i></b> Despite his hatred for criminals and those who prey on the innocent, Dick sees no problem in stealing from those who stole and often does so to be able to give to those who were stolen from. He also does the same around the orphanage as a way of punishing the many bullies around the establishment, in fact, he has become proficient enough to have picked the pocket of many who can afford it. - 300xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Tracking:</i></b> Dick has been forced to trail several criminals whom he is determined to bring to justice, in his own way. From these experiences, he has picked up a rudimentary skill to track those who seek to elude him in his attacks on crime. Although he doesn't put it into practice often, he appreciates the fact that it could be useful in the future. - 190xp </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Challenges| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Challenge: Blames Others</i></b> <br>Dick has laid the blame for his Parent's Murder at the feet of every criminal in Gotham. He seeks to bring about an end to crime by brutally beating every criminal in his path, taking out the low level enforcers until he can work his way up to the bosses. - 250xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Only Human</i></b> <br>Dick isn't anyone special, the only reason he chooses to fight crime is due to an insatiable desire for revenge against any and all of Gotham's criminals. He possesses no meta human genes, nor is he an alien in any sense of the word, he might profess to be more gifted than he actually is, in an attempt to inspire fear or confidence, but in reality all he has to rely on are his own skills, learnt through trial and error, sweat and toil. - 1500xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Guilty Conscience</i></b> <br>Dick isn't sure that his parents would approve of his actions, and perhaps they look down and don't. But it doesn't stop the fact that he hates criminals above all else and after his rage abates a bit, he realises that perhaps he really is doing something wrong. - 300xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Minor Deadly Enemies</i></b> <br>Dick has begun fighting criminals of one sort or another since he first decided to become a force for his own version of justice, vengeance. He attacks indiscriminately and takes a sense of victory from disrupting the machinations of the Mob. For this reason, he is hunted by enforcers and bent cops alike. - 200xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Major Haunted Past</i></b> <br>Dick's driving force is his memory of his parents, and his pure, unrestrained fury at their murder. He has never, and will never, forget their faces as they bled to death in the Narrows of Gotham, no one came to help, as no one would ever come to help two dying people, especially in the Narrows. Jake's fury at this injustice forces him to become someone who will step in to help. But the second cause of his hatred was his introduction into the Narrows Orphanage which exposed him to crime every day. Kids knifed each other in the hallways and no one spoke up. The experience will remain with him for his whole life. - 600xp </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Inventory| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Occupation:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Money:</i></b> 2,000$ <br> <b><i>Items:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Weapons:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Armour:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Transport:</i></b> None <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Origin| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD align=middle> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> Richard Grayson was born to Jack and Maria Grayson at Gotham General Hospital on the seventeenth of March Nineteen Ninety. The pair were acrobats and worked for the Gotham Circus which paid for their small apartment in the Narrows. It wasn't the perfect job, but they loved it. Unknown to his family, however, Jack occasionally moonlighted as a low level enforcer for the Mob to supplement their income, although he never enjoyed it. <br> When Dick was thirteen, two weeks before his birthday, Jack walked out of a job when one of his 'colleagues' shot dead a woman and two children, even calling the police before the man could escape. The man was tried but found not guilty, it was then that Jack came clean to his wife and son about what he had done, although he assured her that he had never hurt anyone. Dick was shaken by the news, although his grades never faltered and he continued to be an exceptional student. His mother and father were his parents and his closest friends, they didn't lie. To find that his father had done so about the extra income he was bringing into the family was disturbing, but he loved him nonetheless. <br> But the Mob didn't forget, and the climax came on Dick's birthday when his parents managed to find enough money to buy him a second bicycle (his first being a much, much smaller one which he had far grown out of. Whilst they were trying it, Dick riding it along beside his parents who were walking, two men stopped in a car, and without hesitation shot both Dick's mother and father, he was only protected by their bodies falling across him and as the men left, called for help. None came, until a passing patrol car stopped and took Dick and his parents to Gotham General as fast as possible. But by then it was too late. Jack Grayson died from internal bleeding which took some time to kill him, whilst Maria died instantly from a shot to the heart. Dick would never get over his parents' brutal murder, nor would he ever forgive what had been done to him. <br> He was sent to an Orphanage after the funeral, since he had no other family, the apartment and possessions sold and the proceeds placed in a trust fund for him when he reached 21. Almost as soon as he entered the place he knew that he had to get out. The staff couldn't control the children, and the Narrows wasn't famed for its good citizens. He learnt the hard way, being beaten up plenty of times before he decided to defend himself. He stole from the bullies and gave to the bullied, refusing to lie down and die. He focused his fury into learning to fight the bullies and eventually they gave him wide berth, unless they came in great enough numbers that they thought they could take him down. <br> By the time Dick was sixteen, he knew how to handle himself. He knew that to take out a kid with a knife, you distracted him and kicked him hard in the groin. He knew that the best way to stop a crowd of kids was to scare them shitless before they came close. He knew how to avoid their gangs, and when to steal their stuff. In short, Dick learnt how to survive in the Orphanage. He had nothing to lose, so he picked on bigger prey, sneaking out of the orphanage at night and attacking drug dealers, coyotes, theives, criminals, beating them as badly as he could to try to satisfy his rage, but it didn't abate, and nor did his thirst to see them suffer for what they had done to him. Inspired by Urban Myths of a Bat who haunted Gotham at night, Dick made more and more night-time excursions, learning from his mistakes and taking his revenge on criminals until the Mob got involved. Dick knew they would find out about his deeds eventually, and he wasn't afraid of dying, they had already taken his life away. So he took to the rooftops each night, using the skills he taught himself, in the desire to beat some light into the underworld. He wasn't afraid to leave a man bleeding and concussed in an alleyway at night, it was payback for everything the loss of his parents had given him. </FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE> [/dohtml] |
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| Jon | Feb 22 2009, 10:25 PM Post #4 |
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Challenges Guilty Conscience: This does not make any sense at all. He was a kid then and couldn't have done anything. Deadly Enemies: He's not well known or anything yet, and haven't done anything big... 200 XP, not 400 Origin Much better. In my personal opinion, though, you've made him perhaps a too dark character compared to how Nightwing is in the comics, but, it's your choice. |
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| Euro! | Mar 17 2009, 09:01 PM Post #5 |
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Everybody loves a dark character ^^ or I think so because everyone loves to see them redeem themselves. I think the guilty conscience should be a bit better now, hopefully. ^^[dohtml] <TABLE borderColor=#ffffff cellSpacing=1 cellPadding=1 align=center bgColor=#000000 border=1> <TBODY><TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Euro!| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR> <TD> <P align=center>< ></P></FONT></P> <P align=center> <TABLE borderColor=#ffffff cellSpacing=1 cellPadding=1 bgColor=#000000 border=1> <TBODY> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Theme Music| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD align=middle> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> Main Theme: Pleased To Meet You - Wolfmother <br> Calm Theme: Gives You Hell - The All-American Rejects <br> Fight Theme: Brianstorm - The Arctic Monkeys <br> Battle Theme: Lets Get It Started - Black Eyed Peas <br> Epic Battle Theme: I Need Speed - Capone <br> Determined Theme: All I Ever Wanted - Basshunter <br> Heroic Theme: Thunderbirds Are Go - Busted <br> Messing About Theme: Jerk It Out - Caesars <br> Epic Theme: Halo 2 Theme - Mjolnir Mix </FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE></P></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Personal Information| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Name:</i></b> Richard 'Dick' Joseph Grayson <br> <b><i>Alias:</i></b> Nightwing <br> <b><i>Race:</i></b> Human <br> <b><i>Gender:</i></b> Male <br> <b><i>Age:</i></b> 18 <br> <b><i>Height:</i></b> 5ft 10 <br> <b><i>Weight:</i></b> 180lbs <br> <b><i>Hair:</i></b> Black <br> <b><i>Eyes:</i></b> Brown <br> <b><i>Alignment:</i></b> Chaotic Good <br> <b><i>Personality:</i></b> Dick has become a hugely vengeful young man since his parents' murder. He blames the whole of Gotham's underbelly for this and takes out his fury on any drug dealer or crook to come his way. When out of his Nightwing Persona, and wearing the mask of Dick Grayson, he is a fairly amiable young man, but a loner by nature. He is kind enough, but tries not to make friends. <br> <b><i>Team:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Secret Origin:</i></b> Trained: -5% Fighting & Knowledge Skills, +5% Items of Power <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Statistics| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Total Experience Gained:</i></b> Info <br> <b><i>Experience Points Left To Use:</i></b> 30 <br> <b><i>Experience Points Used:</i></b> 6820 <br><br> <b><i>Strength:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Agility:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Accuracy:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Durability:</i></b> 3 <br> <b><i>Will Power:</i></b> 3 <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Powers| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <br><P align=center><b>None</b> <br><br><br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Skills| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Acrobatics, Non Powered lvl 10:</i></b> Having been trained in the Circus from a very young age, Dick is an excellent Acrobat, able to perform incredible feats of acrobatics seemingly seamlessly. He uses this in his vigilante actions to gain an advantage over his opponents, using his skills to avoid blows and disorientate his opponent. He is known for being the only human to be able to perform the triple back flip.- 95xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Fighting Skills lvl 10:</i></b> Having taken to the life of a vigilante, beating criminals to a pulp each night in revenge for his parents, Dick has had to learn how to fight quickly. Having started out with receiving as good as he gave, he swiftly began to use tricks learnt from mobsters or drug dealers, and slowly his own injuries began to become fewer and fewer. He is almost the perfect brawler and can defeat many opponents in a fist fight. - 190xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Stealth lvl 10:</i></b> Dick has always been good at getting into places unseen, his lithe body seems adept at worming its way into shadows and gaps. He never really used this skill before, apart from sneaking out of the house after dark to play with his friends when he was younger, friends he alienated after his parents' funeral. Now he uses it to sneak out of the orphanage, to sneak into criminal hideouts, immediately prior to beating them to pulps. - 143xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>IQ lvl 5:</i></b> Whilst not the sharpest knife in the drawer, Dick is not dumb by any stretch of the imagination. He easily smarter than his orphanage counter-parts although doesn't show off with it, preferring to remain below the radar. - 100xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Theivery lvl 6:</i></b> Despite his hatred for criminals and those who prey on the innocent, Dick sees no problem in stealing from those who stole and often does so to be able to give to those who were stolen from. He also does the same around the orphanage as a way of punishing the many bullies around the establishment, in fact, he has become proficient enough to have picked the pocket of many who can afford it. - 300xp/lvl <br><br> <b><i>Tracking:</i></b> Dick has been forced to trail several criminals whom he is determined to bring to justice, in his own way. From these experiences, he has picked up a rudimentary skill to track those who seek to elude him in his attacks on crime. Although he doesn't put it into practice often, he appreciates the fact that it could be useful in the future. - 190xp </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Challenges| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Challenge: Blames Others</i></b> <br>Dick has laid the blame for his Parent's Murder at the feet of every criminal in Gotham. He seeks to bring about an end to crime by brutally beating every criminal in his path, taking out the low level enforcers until he can work his way up to the bosses. - 250xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Only Human</i></b> <br>Dick isn't anyone special, the only reason he chooses to fight crime is due to an insatiable desire for revenge against any and all of Gotham's criminals. He possesses no meta human genes, nor is he an alien in any sense of the word, he might profess to be more gifted than he actually is, in an attempt to inspire fear or confidence, but in reality all he has to rely on are his own skills, learnt through trial and error, sweat and toil. - 1500xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Guilty Conscience</i></b> <br>Dick isn't sure that his parents would approve of his actions, and perhaps they look down and don't. But it doesn't stop the fact that he hates criminals above all else and after his rage abates a bit, he realises that perhaps he really is doing something wrong. - 300xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Minor Deadly Enemies</i></b> <br>Dick has begun fighting criminals of one sort or another since he first decided to become a force for his own version of justice, vengeance. He attacks indiscriminately and takes a sense of victory from disrupting the machinations of the Mob. For this reason, he is hunted by enforcers and bent cops alike. - 200xp <br><br> <b><i>Challenge: Major Haunted Past</i></b> <br>Dick's driving force is his memory of his parents, and his pure, unrestrained fury at their murder. He has never, and will never, forget their faces as they bled to death in the Narrows of Gotham, no one came to help, as no one would ever come to help two dying people, especially in the Narrows. Jake's fury at this injustice forces him to become someone who will step in to help. But the second cause of his hatred was his introduction into the Narrows Orphanage which exposed him to crime every day. Kids knifed each other in the hallways and no one spoke up. The experience will remain with him for his whole life. - 600xp </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Inventory| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> <b><i>Occupation:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Money:</i></b> 2,000$ <br> <b><i>Items:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Weapons:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Armour:</i></b> None <br> <b><i>Transport:</i></b> None <br> </FONT></TD></TR> <TR> <TD align=middle bgColor=#ffffff> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#000000 size=1> |Origin| </FONT></P></TD></TR> <TR><TD align=middle> <P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1> Richard Grayson was born to Jack and Maria Grayson at Gotham General Hospital on the seventeenth of March Nineteen Ninety. The pair were acrobats and worked for the Gotham Circus which paid for their small apartment in the Narrows. It wasn't the perfect job, but they loved it. Unknown to his family, however, Jack occasionally moonlighted as a low level enforcer for the Mob to supplement their income, although he never enjoyed it. <br> When Dick was thirteen, two weeks before his birthday, Jack walked out of a job when one of his 'colleagues' shot dead a woman and two children, even calling the police before the man could escape. The man was tried but found not guilty, it was then that Jack came clean to his wife and son about what he had done, although he assured her that he had never hurt anyone. Dick was shaken by the news, although his grades never faltered and he continued to be an exceptional student. His mother and father were his parents and his closest friends, they didn't lie. To find that his father had done so about the extra income he was bringing into the family was disturbing, but he loved him nonetheless. <br> But the Mob didn't forget, and the climax came on Dick's birthday when his parents managed to find enough money to buy him a second bicycle (his first being a much, much smaller one which he had far grown out of. Whilst they were trying it, Dick riding it along beside his parents who were walking, two men stopped in a car, and without hesitation shot both Dick's mother and father, he was only protected by their bodies falling across him and as the men left, called for help. None came, until a passing patrol car stopped and took Dick and his parents to Gotham General as fast as possible. But by then it was too late. Jack Grayson died from internal bleeding which took some time to kill him, whilst Maria died instantly from a shot to the heart. Dick would never get over his parents' brutal murder, nor would he ever forgive what had been done to him. <br> He was sent to an Orphanage after the funeral, since he had no other family, the apartment and possessions sold and the proceeds placed in a trust fund for him when he reached 21. Almost as soon as he entered the place he knew that he had to get out. The staff couldn't control the children, and the Narrows wasn't famed for its good citizens. He learnt the hard way, being beaten up plenty of times before he decided to defend himself. He stole from the bullies and gave to the bullied, refusing to lie down and die. He focused his fury into learning to fight the bullies and eventually they gave him wide berth, unless they came in great enough numbers that they thought they could take him down. <br> By the time Dick was sixteen, he knew how to handle himself. He knew that to take out a kid with a knife, you distracted him and kicked him hard in the groin. He knew that the best way to stop a crowd of kids was to scare them shitless before they came close. He knew how to avoid their gangs, and when to steal their stuff. In short, Dick learnt how to survive in the Orphanage. He had nothing to lose, so he picked on bigger prey, sneaking out of the orphanage at night and attacking drug dealers, coyotes, theives, criminals, beating them as badly as he could to try to satisfy his rage, but it didn't abate, and nor did his thirst to see them suffer for what they had done to him. Inspired by Urban Myths of a Bat who haunted Gotham at night, Dick made more and more night-time excursions, learning from his mistakes and taking his revenge on criminals until the Mob got involved. Dick knew they would find out about his deeds eventually, and he wasn't afraid of dying, they had already taken his life away. So he took to the rooftops each night, using the skills he taught himself, in the desire to beat some light into the underworld. He wasn't afraid to leave a man bleeding and concussed in an alleyway at night, it was payback for everything the loss of his parents had given him. </FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE> [/dohtml] |
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because everyone loves to see them redeem themselves. I think the guilty conscience should be a bit better now, hopefully. ^^
1:46 AM Jul 11