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Argent Valen; The Prophet
Topic Started: Feb 12 2009, 09:41 AM (330 Views)
Shockzine
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put out a loan to pay for him, put the rest of the cash in his bio after spending my starting 2k on costume powers.



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<TD><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><B>Name:</B> Argent Valen<BR><B>Alias:</B> Prophet<BR><B>Race:</B> Angelic Draenor<BR><B>Gender:</B> Male<BR><B>Age:</B>&nbsp;3,492&nbsp;<BR><B>Height:</B> 6'7<BR><B>Weight:</B>&nbsp;272 <BR><B>Hair:</B>&nbsp;White <BR><B>Eyes:</B>&nbsp;White <BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Skin:</STRONG> Ranges from Cobalt blue[calm] to Indigo[focused] depending on his current mood.<BR><B>Alignment:</B> Lawful Good<BR><B>Personality:</B>&nbsp;Holier then thou attitude, very understanding but consiters himself above most mortal creatures and&nbsp;takes pity upon them. Tries to be humble to fit in and not draw the wrong sort of attention. <BR><B>Team:</B>&nbsp; <BR><B>Secret Origin:</B> Divinely Endowed [Rays of Sacred Flames, Immortal, Severly non human, Circle of Healing, Telepathy]</EM></FONT></FONT></FONT></TD></TR>
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<TD><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><B>Total Experience Gained:</B> 0<BR><B>Experience Points Left To Use:</B> 0<BR><B>Experience Points Used:</B> 10,000<BR><BR><B>Strength:</B> 1<BR><B>Agility/Speed:</B> 7 [10.5]<BR><B>Accuracy:</B> 3 [4.5]<BR><B>Durability:</B> 1+2=3<BR><B>Will Power:</B> 5 [5.5]<BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT></TD></TR>
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<TD><FONT color=#ffffff><EM><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Immortal<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent is a Divine Creature born from&nbsp;another&nbsp;realm and endowed with both&nbsp;eternal life and a divine spirit.&nbsp;As such he is a being that is immune to&nbsp;natural death. 720XP<BR><BR></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Self Contained Life Form<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>As he is an Immortal, Argent requires nothing to live or survive other then to exist. [all options, linked to immortal] 750XP<BR><BR></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Enhanced Healing Factor<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Being Immortal, Argent&nbsp;is tough to harm, and even harder to kill. His divine blood constantly regenerates his body at a&nbsp;rate&nbsp;on par with other simular beings of&nbsp;that nature. lvl 1, linked to&nbsp;Immortal, cannot be improved&nbsp;150XP/lvl<BR><BR></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Circle of Light[Healing]<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent being a&nbsp;being of Divine orgin, feels compassion and pity for creatures below him. he can manufest his own powers to restore anothers&nbsp;strength&nbsp;and repair their wounds, this can even be&nbsp;focused on himself to increace his already enhanced&nbsp;healing factor, while this can be used in an area, Argent is able to focus it upon allies while preventing it from effecting opponents. lvl 1, linked to Immortal, Area Effect, limited range 20ft, emotional control[focus]&nbsp;360XP/lvl<BR><BR></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Rays of Sacred Flames[Force blast, Magic(divine)]<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent&nbsp;channels the divine energy into his hands or eyes&nbsp;and fires them off at the opponent.&nbsp;These&nbsp;beams are completely controled by Argent and can change course, pass completely through defences or even completely disapate&nbsp;after being fired to prevent innocents from getting harmed.. these beams of light&nbsp;are trailed by a echo of divine energy, this energy causes those struck to&nbsp;become inflamed with a&nbsp;Divine fire. However, Argent must be&nbsp;focused in order to use this power properly.&nbsp;lvl 2, Linked to Immortal, Control, Armor Piercing, Aftershock, Emotional control[focus],&nbsp;720&nbsp;XP/lvl<BR><STRONG>&nbsp;</STRONG><BR></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Severely Non Human<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent was once demon born in hell, however, unlike the rest of the demons, he was born with a soul. He fought and Freed his soul from the clutches of hell, and transmigrated the right to serve in heaven and was reborn as&nbsp;the first and so far only&nbsp;Draenor, a&nbsp;divine Archdeamon of God. As he has been Transmigrated he has been endowed and blessed so that some of his powers are a part of him and&nbsp;always active;&nbsp;thus cannot be negated. [Immortal, Self contained life form, Healing factor, and Circle of Light] Also this causes the area in a&nbsp;50ft radius&nbsp;around Argent, and the ground below[if he is flying] to become a sacred holy ground. Those with weaknesses or challenges agenst standing on holy ground[mainly&nbsp;vampires, demons, undead, etc]&nbsp;are forced to flee to the edges of holy ground or else completely colapse[players] or discintigrate[npcs]. a small side effect of this allows plants and recently dead or dying animals to return back to life. linked to immortal&nbsp;1035 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>Flight</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent can fly without the requirement of wings, his Divine spirit just lifts him. lvl 1, Linked to Immortal, 150 XP/lvl<BR><BR></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Super Speed<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent&nbsp;Can use his Afinity with&nbsp;Divine powers to boost his own physical&nbsp;speed in this realm and can move many times faster then most can see. Linked to Immortal, Emotional control[focus],&nbsp;650XP<BR><BR><STRONG>Telepathy</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;The Divine Spirit grants Argent the abilities to read into anothers deepest thoughts without restrictions. lvl 1, linked to immortal, emotional control[focus] multiple targets, project thoughts, create links, mental bolts, repair minds, undetectable.&nbsp;1395 XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>Penance Beam</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;A ray shot in a simular form as the beams of sacred fire, however, these beams cause an opponent to fall into a deep trance like state if it overcomes their will power. It is consitered magical[divine] in nature and form. lvl 2, linked to immortal, disabling effect, beam does no damage, emotional control, 100XP/lvl<BR><BR></FONT></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Reflexive Dodge<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent can dodge attacks before&nbsp;they&nbsp;strike him&nbsp;from drawing upon the speed granted to him from his divine spirit. lvl 3, linked to Super Speed,&nbsp;75xp/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>Reflexive Aim</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent is able to aim with supurb accuracy. lvl 5, Emotional Control[focus] 50 XP/lvl<BR><BR></FONT></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Sense Powers<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Through the Divine spirit within him he can feel creatures of exceptional strength and skill no matter what their orgin, while he doesn't know about their powers, he does however know what orgin they come from. lvl 1, Linked to Immortal, all orgins, emotional control required[focus].&nbsp;225XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>Mental Defence</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;The Divine Spirit inside of him shields his mind from intruders, protecting his thoughts and actions and making them only his own. lvl 1, emotional control[focus], character has telepathy&nbsp;&nbsp;100 XP/lvl<BR><BR></FONT></FONT></FONT></EM><EM><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG>Prescience<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Granted through the Divine, Argent is able to sense danger shortly before it strikes him. lvl&nbsp;1 Linked to Immortal, 250 XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>Enhanced Vision</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Through the Divine spirit, Argent can see things most people cannot see. linked to immortal, can see auras and magical forces, 100 XP<BR></FONT></FONT></FONT></EM></FONT></TD></TR>
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<TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1><STRONG><EM>I.Q.</EM></STRONG><EM>&nbsp;<BR>&nbsp;Argent is a Immortal being of unparalleled Intelegence. lvl 10, 1000 XP<BR><BR></EM><EM><STRONG>Enhanced Cognition Speed<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent can think much faster then most people of this dimention. 600 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>Concentration</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent can focus much eayser then most people. 200 XP<BR><BR></EM><EM><STRONG>Photographic Memory<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent can recall just about anything he has ever seen or known. 300 XP</EM><BR></FONT></TD></TR>
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<TD><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Compulsion to Stick Up for the Underdog</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent takes pity upon the mortals of this realm, and as such uses his power to aid those in dire need, never leaving them behind. <BR>XP Worth: 200 XP<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Non-Human Appearance</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;um.... just take a look at the pics.. boney plates sticking out of the&nbsp;forehead, tenticles at the chin, blue skin, hoved feet, um yeah... i think its fair to say&nbsp;no one will mistake him for human. &nbsp;<BR>.Severely non-human: 600 XP<BR>&nbsp;<BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>No Secret Identity</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent's allias as the Prophet is only coincidental and media driven, Argent cannot hide his appearance and is known to the world at large as just prophet no matter where he is. His true name bears no weight and is mostly only known to those divine creatures of his home realm, but even on earth it bears no weight and if asked for his name he will willingly give it.&nbsp;<BR>XP Worth: 500 XP<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Won’t Break the Law</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent is a creature who is bound by divine rights and laws, as such he can never under any circumstance preform any acts consitered&nbsp;chaotic&nbsp;nor evil in nature with the&nbsp;exception being those acts being preformed for the greater&nbsp;good and required sacrifice.. &nbsp;<BR>XP Worth: 300 XP<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Alien</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent was not created from this world or even from this realm, being an angelic "Draenor" from heaven and sent down toward earth to defend it from demonic and unholy forces. he can be viewed by many as being that which he fights... a demon. <BR>XP Worth: 400 XP </EM><BR></FONT></FONT></FONT></TD></TR>
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<P align=center><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1>Argent Valen was born as Ragnos Infernus in the year 2084 B.C. He was an abomination of the Infernal fires of Hell, however a rare thing occured; he was born with a soul. For the first 500 years of his existance he was a minion and follower of Lucifer and a loyal one at that. He commited so many crimes through possessions and caused thousands of souls to become corrupted and decend into the darkness. <BR><BR>One day however&nbsp;as he attempted to corrupt a innocent&nbsp;10 year old homeless girl, Nina. &nbsp;by inflicting her with the most horrible nightmares and torcurous rape to spawn a demon child, he accidently was led into the remains of a ruined temple. the moment he steped upon the concencrated ground his body began to feel as if it was about to explode. Before he knew it he collapsed.&nbsp;<BR><BR>His eyes awoke two weeks later, only to discover he was saved by the same girl whom he was chasing and whos soul he was attempting to darken. Something happened durring the time he was being nursed back to health. His soul, which had been stained black, gradually lightened. Over the next 10 years he remained on earth, protecting the girl and repenting his sins to the dismay of Lucifer.<BR><BR>One fateful day, A legion of Demons appeared sourounding their home in an attempt to Kill the girl and return Ragnos to hell. In an act of self sacrifice Ragnos threw himself&nbsp;in the way of a Fatal blast to save her, unfortuneatly they were both killed; however, that simple act was enough to redeam Ragnos's soul and he asended to heaven. <BR><BR>Upon&nbsp;reaching the gates along with Nina, the god Yahweh&nbsp;summoned him alone and gave him an offer. Serve him&nbsp;and be reborn in Heaven or reject the offer and&nbsp;return to&nbsp;Hell. Ragnos willingly accepted the offer and in a flash of&nbsp;bright light blacked&nbsp;out.<BR><BR>Seventy Eight years passed on earth before Ragnos awoke from his&nbsp;slumber.&nbsp;He was no longer himself, his long leathery wings were gone, his skin was a&nbsp;cobalt blue, and his&nbsp;horns changed into a boney structure upon his head; his split hoves were joined into a single horse like&nbsp;hoof; his tail, once long and lanky was now thick and&nbsp;consisted of armored segments. He awoke no longer Ragnos Infernus, but Argent Valen, a Holy a Draenor, or archdeamon of God. His past&nbsp;never forgotten, he served the Lord faithfully for many years. He spent his free time with Nina, who was happy to have her friend back.&nbsp;<BR><BR>Many millenia passed sense Argent had&nbsp;began service to the lord, One day Yahweh summoned him, faithfully he approched&nbsp;the lords throne and was told that the earth needed balance. Hellish forces were begining to all too regularly&nbsp;gaining too much power on earth and that Argent was needed to keep them in check.&nbsp;Argent took the orders with much humility. Before he left he said his&nbsp;farewells and departed to Earth.&nbsp;However,&nbsp;the trip left him in a weakened state. He was not used to this degree of evil&nbsp;in the world and it zapped his power leaving only&nbsp;portions remaining while others were completely gone.&nbsp;It didn't matter, however his mission was clear... Return any demonic forces back to&nbsp;where they belong. <BR><BR>Two years&nbsp;have passed,&nbsp;and rumors of his deeds slowly spreading around the globe, as news of a&nbsp;blue&nbsp;"Prophet"&nbsp;was proforming miraculous deeds, both big and small.&nbsp;To many he was only a&nbsp;urban&nbsp;legend like big foot.&nbsp;However those that met him knew the truth. In Africa he helped rebuild villages in war torn countries; in Asia he helped farmers&nbsp;rice crops produce twice more rice then was expected and assisted&nbsp;villagers in the removal of landmines; in the americas he helped the&nbsp;poor in mexico to south america helping them however he could. While never needing to sleep or eat, he found he did enjoy it on occasion and humblely accepted a grateful host's offer, while holding no malice to those who only wished him to leave. Due to him being a Divine Being, he could never be properly photographed, his&nbsp;spirit caused&nbsp;a large white blur to appear in his place. thus only continuing the belief that he was only a&nbsp;legend. <BR><BR>Not everything was jolly for Argent, his appearance&nbsp;has caused him much&nbsp;humiliation over instant ridicule and fear when he happens upon&nbsp;other humans, soon however he usually&nbsp;overcomes those fears by preforming acts of great kindness. He never&nbsp;feels anger at this, instead he only feels pity&nbsp;and remorse for their souls should they continue on that path. He has however vanquished&nbsp;quite a few demons back to hell as his powers began&nbsp;to resurface. <BR><BR><BR>&nbsp;&nbsp;<BR><IMG height=514 src="http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/wowwiki/images/d/dd/VelenCardgameArt.jpg" width=450><BR>&nbsp;</FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE></DIV></DIV>[/dohtml]
 
Jon
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Haven't looked at anything but the money, but... only your first character starts with any money on their own, without having taken a loan or anything
 
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alright adding to what Jon said you have used 17 stat points (and yes I am not looking at the ones you bought just the base)

1 + 7 = 8
8 + 3 = 11
11 + 1 = 12
12 + 5 = 17

so yah...gonna have to get rid of a couple base points there

now onto powers

not gonna look at XP yet becuase you have some things you need to change which will effect the cost ^^

Circle of Healing: This cannot be area of effect, healing is a touch ability so yah the description needs to be retooled and you need to remove the AOE and Limited range modifiers. Also if you choose focus as an emotional control I am going to say he has to have complete 100% mental focus on healing alone, which menas if he gets distracted the healing stops, that what you were goin for?

Rays of Sacred Flames Alright this one is almost alright except for a couple things in your description. He cannot cause the forceblast to dissapear via control (I believe) control just manipulates the direction so if someone threw a innocent in the path of the blast they would get hit. Also about the aftershock, might just be dramatic flair but the "enflames" description...they would not actually be set on fire unless that character had that specific weakness...just so you know. Also as with circle of healing focus means this is the ONLY thing he is focusing on, he needs to be 100% focused on attacking to use this.

Inhuman Physiology This is a complete no go. First off you cannot link powers on Justice to your physiology and make them unnegatable, if you want them to be unnegatable then buy Power Negation protection. Secondly the sanctified ground and ressurecting recently dead things? Also a no, you cant have an ability that essentially makes certain PCs AND NPCs unable to approach you and godmod the effects that happen should they try. So this power needs to be removed as a whole.

Super Speed Just a couple things, he can still be seen, im pretty sure you know that but until he is going light speed or perhaps mach speed he can still be seen (and it takes 2-3 posts to get up to your top speed). Second the focus again, 100% focused on this task and nothing else.

Telepathy Same thing with the focus

Penance Beam same as above

Sense Powers 100% focus as all the rest

Reflexive Aim and Mental Defenses I'm not gonna allow the emotional control on these. They make no sense as he would have to be 100% focused on aiming (couldnt attack) or defending his mind (couldnt do anything else) so remove those.

IQ: Alright ancient immortal divine demon sage merits this, I'll allow the 10 IQ

Concentration just an FYI this doesnt mean his powers with emotional control will always work. As I have said he will have to be completley 100% focused on just the ONE thing with emotional control, that means no moving, no talking, no thing but using that ability mkay?

Challenges time!!!!

No Secret Identity Im sorry this wont be allowed. As you said right there he CANT hide his identity. Secret Identities are like Batman who have a life outside their superhero thing, no secret identity would be like if Batman decided to admit he was bruce wayne. Your guy isnt going to have any private life and he cant hide who he is...this is a no go.

Won't Break the LawI'll allow this but only if you retool the description. This means he cannot break the law of the country he is currently in, not just divine law. The whole common good thing will not fly, if a law is against the common good he would still HAVE to obey it.

Alien He isnt an alien...he is an angelic demon. This is also not allowed.

Anyway fix that, then I will look at XP usage and your origin.
 
Jon
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Going through the origin...

From the guy rp'ing Lucifer... that's NOT how he works. Here's a run down of how Lucifer works from him:

basically, the idea is that a lot of what we think about satan today (buying souls, tricking mortals, corruption etc) isn't from lucifer himself, but from other demons or even angelic propaganda. He doesn't need to trick people into selling him their souls; why does he need souls anyway? people go to hell because they think they should.
Lucifer himself is more of a ruler in Hell than a corrupter on Earth; he's got all the Fallen and a fuck load of demons to keep from tearing each other apart. Meanwhile, other Hell-kingdoms are eyeing up his astral real estate.. Lucifer doesn't care about a human soul. But demons do, so he does allow them to have their fun, most of the time.
and lucifer is all about freedom; a guy wants to go torture humans? fine. he wants to go SAVE humans? fine, as long as it's of his own free will. he wouldn't give two shits nine times out of ten unless it was something on a pretty big scale that might upset the political agendas and plans he has.
if he wants a more 'traditional' satan-figure, he could go for a different hell-kingdom though.

So... Lucifer himself doesn't care about the souls and all that... And so your thing about him following Lucifer doesn't hold.

God... even refered to as Yahweh... doesn't personally interfere with pretty much everything... which, I'm sorry, more or less destroys that origin. And even if a demon somehow redeemed himself (I'd say it would take more than that) and was allowed into Heaven, he would never be granted powers like that...

'Due to him being a Divine Being, he could never be properly photographed, his spirit caused a large white blur to appear in his place. thus only continuing the belief that he was only a legend.'
^that would be a power you'd have to take...
 
Shockzine
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tried to post this yesterday but damn backspace messed sent me back a page and cause it to just break off loose. so this will be short and sweet.

1st. he has 17 stat points because i bought 2 for duribility... see the +2 there.

2nd. circle of healing- isnt that the reason why we have the AoE modifier to make things work in that way?

3rd. aftershock states that it could be something different entirely. but because i didnt discribe it exactly as i should... the 3/4 th damage from the power of the aftershock is achieved over a duration and not all at once say 1/4th the damage per post for 3 posts or so but effects characters as if it was at still at 75% of the normal level.. nor is it fire so its not going to burn them or restrict them from breathing.... the aftershock on this is not intended to mainly harm, but mearly ment to distract through pain.

4th. for having severely non human... I get an Offencive ability right... I think if a human no more then 20 years of age can santify ground through a ritual that demons, undead, and demonicly endowed creatures can not enter.... I think a creature born in heaven and living for over 3 millenia can do automaticly as just part of just being born in heaven. and as for godmoding.... their the ones that have on their bios "cannot enter holy ground" as a damn challenge. its like making a power that teleports ppl into a moving bus and not expect them to act psychotic or out of their mind in one way or another if they have "cant ride in a plane or car" if its for any other reason then they are too big.. as such through this, zombies created from voo doo would instantly just turn to dust as they continued walking in. vampires that chose this as a leathality wouldn't die right away but would if they didnt move away. and for others i dont think it would be a big leap to assume they would be compelled to flee or be KO'd or just in severe pain while in there.. not only that but This only works on a very few people period... and even out of those ppl... it only works on those that that have it listed on their bios that they cant stand on or enter sanctified[holy] ground as either a Vampire or Super natural restriction....... anyway as for the rest of the discription... that was mainly through the combined used of Circle of healing... a dead forest would start to spring back to life and being to grow lush and habitable again, a bird that was sick and dying in a tree would feel better and take off flying. it was just for cool effect... mainly.. no real uses in battle.. maybe a bad hindarance should he ever fight poison ivy or any one with animal control. but ill take it out.

5. i talked to you about the emotional control thing, and ill change it then you can see what i mean.

6. um... and who exactly says that argent has no outside life other then fighting demons? if you read his orgin you would know that for the last 2 years on earth he has been helping others, he may not have a house to call his own as he constantly travels, but he does have friends... and enemies on earth in the form of demons he has vanquished, and governments or regimes that do not like him, either through political pressure . If enemies wish to find him all they need to do is look and find any report on his current location through the mulitple news networks around the globe, he doesnt hide who he is because he feels it helps his goal to eradicate demons. however by doing so he puts those that he helps or is around in constant danger by that threat..... so i feel it fits quite perfectly, as he is always a target no matter where he is, or by what he does. and not to make a purposly marvels referance but he is like ben grimm... yeah he is called the thing, and cannot hide his apperance if he tried but he does things outside the whole "clobbering time" thing... and thats exactly what argent is.... even your logic is a little flawed because[i havent read jon's superman] but say if super man took that challenge, clark kent would no longer exist, everyone would have to call him kal-el sense technically... super man is his true nature and clark kent is his alter ego on how we look to superman. ----- also, until I can start RPing him, I cant really make a life too detailed now can I.

7. the whole challenge is too loose in discription if ya'll want it like that it needs to be changed.... Like a Lanturn can take it, and will be forced to follow the laws of the lanturn corps. a solidier of an evil empire can take it and be forced to follow those rules but if he is trying to expand the empire and stuff he isnt going to be following the countries rules of those he is invading. but anyway im going to change this to deadly enemies instead.

8. quoted from the alien challenge "That is, an extraterrestrial alien, from somewhere else than the Earth" extraterrestial as defined on freedictionary.com. being born in heaven or hell is consitant with that defination. extra meaning beyond and terrestial meaning earth[as gotten from wiki]. and argent is most definatly from "beyond earth"

ex·tra·ter·res·tri·al (kstr-t-rstr-l)
adj.
Originating, located, or occurring outside Earth or its atmosphere: intelligent extraterrestrial life.
n.
An extraterrestrial being or life form.


9.) ill fix the origin for ya jon, i think i have a better idea anyway.


anyways ill post again with every thing fixed
 
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Hoookay Shock lets go through your points together shall we, and I'm going to try and be nice so apologies if I sound a bit terse at moments.
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1. I did the math for you Shock, he has 19 with the two you bought, 17 before hand but I'll do the math again maybe you missed it.
Strength: 1
Speed: 7
Accuracy: 3
Durability: 1
Will Power : 5

and then you bough 2 for durabiltity now for the math again.

1 + 7 = 8
8 + 3 = 11
11 + 1 = 12
12 + 5 = 17

so your BASE stats before the 2 you bought are at 17, remove BASE stats somewhere which means from either Speed, Accuracy, or Will your only above 2.

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2. No, AOE is for things like forceblasts which are normally just a lance of energy, this makes them an attack that hits everything in an area. Healing defines it as a TOUCH attack, which means it has to be by touch. Remove the AOE

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3. Something different entierly meaning another way it is shown, not changing how it acts entierly. It is a single aftershock of energy, not burning for any amount of turns even if it doesnt do anything besides the damage. Aftershock is a SECOND blast of energy at 3/4 power, not a second third and fourth at 1/4. So either remove the burning thing or take out the aftershock.

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4. I'm sorry this just won't be allowed, I've talked to Jon about this and he agrees. It is way too powerful as it makes any number of PC characters that could be made unable to approach you without godmodded results. So this entire power will not be allowed, remove it.

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5. as I said when we talked it doesnt work like that. If you take focus as your control it means this is what you are focusing on. You can argue all you want but its staying like that, if you want to change it to calm or something like that it will work, but focus means 100% focus.

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6. youd be suprised how big a life you can give him outside before the RP starts. For example my character Pyre has a family, has had 16 years of life school family and friends. He has a personal life, girlfriends, school, so on and so forth that he is choosing not to hide. Your guy is a divine arbiter basically who has no private life not because he chooses not to hide it but because he does NOTHING else but this. As I said you cannot have a secret identity unless you change it so he has a personal life that could be hidden, just having friends wont cut it. My char Vigilance has a master and has people he cares for, but I didnt give him no secret identity because he has nothing else but his mission. So once again, give him a personal private life or remove this.

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7. Alright good that you are changing it so im not going to say anythign on this.

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8. While I appreciate the defintion here Shock, it isnt really needed. What it says in the dictionary doesnt much matter on this site rather it is what is intended behind the topic. I am telling you again he is not an Alien, so im sorry that will have to be changed. Maybe you can take haunted past (Depending on how you change the origin)

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9. Nothing to say on this


Anywya those are my points, change what I've said. Feel free to argue but this isnt me being confused this is your powers and challenges not being allowed by the rules. You can argue as much as you want, point remains that theres nothing to argue. Most everything here (I think everything actually) has already been looked at by Jon and if something was wrong he would have said something. So fix it please and I'll take another look.
 
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lol you replied too soon iminicus... i didnt fix anything yet... lol well until now.. i think i have everything, took out telepathy for now and bought more stats i think it should be right with 19 total now.. but go ahead and double check for me.. fixed the challenges as well. I might get some discounts due to knowledge skills, just dont know which...

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<TD><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><B>Name:</B> Argent Valen<BR><B>Alias:</B> Prophet<BR><B>Race:</B> Angelic Draenor<BR><B>Gender:</B> Male<BR><B>Age:</B>&nbsp;3,492&nbsp;<BR><B>Height:</B> 6'7<BR><B>Weight:</B>&nbsp;272 <BR><B>Hair:</B>&nbsp;White <BR><B>Eyes:</B>&nbsp;White <BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Skin:</STRONG> Ranges from Cobalt blue[calm] to Indigo[focused] depending on his current mood.<BR><B>Alignment:</B> Lawful Good<BR><B>Personality:</B>&nbsp;Holier then thou attitude, very understanding but consiters himself above most mortal creatures and&nbsp;takes pity upon them. Tries to be humble to fit in and not draw the wrong sort of attention. <BR><B>Team:</B>&nbsp; <BR><B>Secret Origin:</B> Divinely Endowed [Rays of Sacred Flames, Immortal, Severly non human, Divine Light, Telepathy]</EM></FONT></FONT></FONT></TD></TR>
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<TD><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Immortal<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent is a Divine Creature born from&nbsp;another&nbsp;realm and endowed with both&nbsp;eternal life and a divine spirit.&nbsp;As such he is a being that is immune to&nbsp;natural death.&nbsp;[discount applied to arcane knowledge, Military knowledge&nbsp;and history,&nbsp;<BR>&nbsp;720XP<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Self Contained Life Form<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>As he is an Immortal, Argent requires nothing to live or survive other then to exist. <BR>&nbsp;[all options, linked to immortal] 750XP<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Enhanced Healing Factor<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Being Immortal, Argent&nbsp;is tough to harm, and even harder to kill. His divine blood constantly regenerates his body at a&nbsp;rate&nbsp;on par with other simular beings of&nbsp;that nature.<BR>&nbsp; lvl 1, linked to&nbsp;Immortal, cannot be improved&nbsp;150XP/lvl<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Divine&nbsp;Light[Healing]<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent being a&nbsp;being of Divine orgin, feels compassion and pity for creatures below him. he can manufest his own powers to restore anothers&nbsp;strength&nbsp;and repair their wounds, this can even be&nbsp;focused on himself to increace his already enhanced&nbsp;healing factor,<BR>&nbsp; lvl 1, linked to Immortal, emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate]&nbsp;225XP/lvl<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Rays of Sacred Flames[Force blast, Magic(divine)]<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent&nbsp;channels the divine energy into his hands or eyes&nbsp;and fires them off at the opponent.&nbsp;These&nbsp;beams are completely controled by Argent and can change course, pass completely through defences or even completely disapate&nbsp;after being fired to prevent innocents from getting harmed.&nbsp;<BR>&nbsp;lvl 2, Linked to Immortal, Control, Armor Piercing, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp;450&nbsp;XP/lvl [900xp total]<BR><STRONG>&nbsp;</STRONG><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Severely Non Human<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent was once demon born in hell, however, unlike the rest of the demons, he was born with a soul. He fought and Freed his soul from the clutches of hell, and transmigrated the right to serve in heaven and was reborn as&nbsp;the first and so far only&nbsp;Draenor, a&nbsp;divine Archdeamon of God. As he has been Transmigrated</EM> <EM>there exist a number of key differences between him and a human being. For one thing, he is effectively lacking what one would consider 'organs', nor does he have any blood. Possessing supernatural beauty, he seems to shine with a radiant aura at all times. He is next to immune to telepathy, and is able to survive grevious wounds as long as he has will to sustain his body.<BR>&nbsp;linked to immortal&nbsp;1035 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>Flight</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent can fly without the requirement of wings, his Divine spirit just lifts him.<BR>&nbsp;lvl 3, Linked to Immortal, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp; 50 XP/lvl [150xp total]<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Super Speed<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent&nbsp;Can use his Afinity with&nbsp;Divine powers to boost his own physical&nbsp;speed in this realm and can move many times faster then most can see. <BR>&nbsp;Linked to Immortal,Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp;650XP<BR><BR><STRONG>Penance Beam</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;A ray shot in a simular form as the beams of sacred fire, however, these beams cause an opponent to fall into a deep trance like state if it overcomes their will power. It is consitered magical[divine] in nature and form. <BR>&nbsp;lvl 1, linked to immortal, disabling effect, beam does no damage, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp;100XP/lvl<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Reflexive Dodge<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent can dodge attacks before&nbsp;they&nbsp;strike him&nbsp;from drawing upon the speed granted to him from his divine spirit.<BR>&nbsp;lvl 3, linked to Super Speed,&nbsp;75xp/lvl [225xp total]<BR><BR><STRONG>Reflexive Aim</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent is able to aim with supurb accuracy.<BR>&nbsp;lvl 5,&nbsp;Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp; 50 XP/lvl [250xp total]<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Sense Powers<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Through the Divine spirit within him he can feel creatures of exceptional strength and skill no matter what their orgin, while he doesn't know about their powers, he does however know what orgin they come from. <BR>&nbsp;lvl 1, Linked to Immortal, all orgins, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp;225XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>Mental Defence</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;The Divine Spirit inside of him shields his mind from intruders, protecting his thoughts and actions and making them only his own. <BR>&nbsp;lvl 2, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp;character has telepathy&nbsp;&nbsp;100 XP/lvl [200xp total]<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Prescience<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Granted through the Divine, Argent is able to sense danger shortly before it strikes him. <BR>&nbsp;lvl&nbsp;1 Linked to Immortal, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp; 150 XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>Enhanced Vision</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Through the Divine spirit, Argent can see things most people cannot see. <BR>&nbsp;linked to immortal, can see auras and magical forces, 100 XP<BR><STRONG><BR>Coming soon....<BR>Telepathy<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;The Divine Spirit grants Argent the abilities to read into anothers deepest thoughts without restrictions. lvl 0, linked to immortal, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp; multiple targets, project thoughts, create links, mental bolts, repair minds, undetectable.&nbsp;1395 XP/lvl<BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT></FONT></TD></TR>
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<TD><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif" color=#ffffff size=1><STRONG><EM>I.Q.</EM></STRONG><EM>&nbsp;<BR>&nbsp;Argent is a Immortal being of unparalleled Inteligence. lvl 10, 1000 XP<BR><BR></EM><EM><STRONG>Enhanced Cognition Speed<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent can think much faster then most people of this dimention. 600 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>Concentration</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent can focus much eayser then most people. 200 XP<BR><BR></EM><EM><STRONG>Photographic Memory<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent can recall just about anything he has ever seen or known. 300 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>Arcane Knowledge<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Being a creature from the lands after mortal death, Argent knows about angels and demons, due to meeting with them on a day to day basis. and while the decent from heaven has caused a haze over most of his knowledge on the subject, this temporary amnesia will pass eventually.. lvl&nbsp;3 80XP/lvl <BR><BR><STRONG>History Knowledge</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;You dont live for over 3000 years without experiencing some things, as with his arcane knowledge he has forgotten some things from the past, but nothing a refresher course or a little study time couldn't fix. lvl&nbsp;2 80XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>Military Tactics</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent was a strong natural leader and tactician, and&nbsp;the strength of his heart,&nbsp;loyalty, and divine power&nbsp;were&nbsp;enough to&nbsp;grant him&nbsp;the same stadus as a Seraphim. As such he can lead other angels in battle as a General, and has on multiple occasions fighting side by side with Michael the Arch Angel and have even ventured into hell on occasion with Gaberel to quell particular uprisings agenst heaven before they grew any larger.&nbsp;more recently his knowledge has been waining and he just hasnt been himself sense he arrived on earth. 270XP</EM></FONT></TD></TR>
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<TD><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Traitor/Disgrace</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Because he was once a former demon,&nbsp;their are still some angels that distrust him. almost&nbsp;all of hell's demons are in one way or another jellous of him, not for&nbsp;going to heaven, but for the power he obtained for doing so and consiter him a&nbsp;traitor and&nbsp;would consiter his death a mark of power. &nbsp;<BR>XP Worth: 300 XP<BR>&nbsp;</EM><BR></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Non-Human Appearance</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;um.... just take a look at the pics.. boney plates sticking out of the&nbsp;forehead, tenticles at the chin, blue skin, hoved feet, um yeah... i think its fair to say&nbsp;no one will mistake him for human.&nbsp;&nbsp;<BR>Severely non-human: 600 XP<BR>&nbsp;<BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Haunted Past<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent's past is laced with the sins of&nbsp;his former life,&nbsp;those sins he repents for and every action he makes is to ammend for the unfortold&nbsp;horror, and pain he caused to hundreds of thousands of souls on earth during his thousand year existance as a Demon. While Heaven consiters his soul clean and clear after he was reborn, He personally does not feel that way and continues to&nbsp;fight agenst the forces of&nbsp;evil&nbsp;to pay for those&nbsp;sins. to him even an eternity of&nbsp;sacrifice is not enough to pay for his crimes. &nbsp;&nbsp;<BR>Major Haunted Past (The reason that you do what you do, something that you always think about and can never forget): 600 XP</EM><BR><BR></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG><EM>Guilty Conscience<BR></EM></STRONG>&nbsp;<EM>Due to the sins of his prior life, Argent still consiters his current actions a sign of penance to atone for those sins. <BR>XP Worth: 300 XP</EM><BR><BR></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>Deadly Enemies<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent had many enemies when he was still Ragnos, most minor rival demons struggling for power and domination. Then he became a traior to demon-kind and began to repent.. still only a slight neucense... however once he was reborn into a Draenor, he became something else entirely. Time and time again he ventured into Hell to quell uprisings that were well on their way to declaring war on heaven&nbsp;and to keep hell a chaotic mess. Current rulers in hell know that he is a central figure in the defence of Heaven, taking ranks with other seriphim in battle and commanding legions of angels, as such they wish him dead and any demon that could kill him would instantly gain&nbsp;power through that recognition&nbsp;or through pacts made with&nbsp;the rulers of hell. on earth, many consiter him a sign of the&nbsp;Apocolypse as the prophisized "false prophet" from revelations, and this is fueled through the proclamations of the Pope of the Catholic Church.&nbsp;Many a&nbsp;fanatic would wish him dead as well.&nbsp;That of course isnt counting the&nbsp;demons on&nbsp;earth who see him as a threat to their&nbsp;dealings on earth not to mention a threat to them personally.&nbsp;&nbsp;<BR>XP Worth: 800 XP </EM><BR></FONT></FONT></FONT></TD></TR>
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Before he knew it he collapsed.&nbsp;<BR><BR>His eyes awoke two weeks later, only to discover he was saved by the same girl whom he was chasing and whos soul he was attempting to darken. Something happened durring the time he was being nursed back to health. His soul, which had been stained black, gradually lightened. Over the next 10 years he remained on earth, protecting the girl and repenting his sins to the dismay of his demon king.<BR><BR>One fateful day, A legion of demons appeared sourounding their home in an attempt to Kill the girl and return Ragnos to hell. In an act of self sacrifice Ragnos threw himself&nbsp;in the way of a Fatal blast to save her, unfortuneatly they were both killed; however, that simple act was enough to redeam Ragnos's soul and he asended to heaven. <BR><BR>Upon&nbsp;reaching the gates along with Nina, the god Yahweh&nbsp;summoned him alone and gave him an offer seeing his potential.&nbsp; be reborn in Heaven or return to&nbsp;Hell. Ragnos willingly accepted the offer to be reborn&nbsp;and in a flash of&nbsp;bright light blacked&nbsp;out.<BR><BR>Seventy Eight years passed on earth before Ragnos awoke from his&nbsp;slumber.&nbsp;He was no longer himself, his long leathery wings were gone, his skin was a&nbsp;cobalt blue, and his&nbsp;horns changed into a boney structure upon his head; his split hoves were joined into a single horse like&nbsp;hoof; his tail, once long and lanky was now thick and&nbsp;consisted of armored segments. He awoke no longer Ragnos Infernus, but Argent Valen, a Holy a Draenor, or archdeamon of God. His past&nbsp;never forgotten, he served the Lord faithfully for many years. He spent his free time with Nina, who was happy to have her friend back.&nbsp;<BR><BR>Many millenia passed sense Argent had&nbsp;began service to Yahweh.&nbsp;Durring which he had quelled multiple uprisings&nbsp;in hell&nbsp;to&nbsp;prevent attacks on heavens gates along with gabrael, and even&nbsp;fought with michael agenst a few&nbsp;direct attacks whose uprisings&nbsp;were&nbsp;initially missed. On earth he was responcible&nbsp;for watching and&nbsp;gauging the&nbsp;strength of the influence of both the churches, demons, and goverments;&nbsp;for delivering messages as the&nbsp;metatron or voice of the&nbsp;lord on earth; and for making sure the&nbsp;demonic influence on earth remains in check&nbsp;so&nbsp;armageddon doesn't begin prematurly.&nbsp;One day&nbsp;he was watching events as they occured on earth and began to realize something... no matter what he saw, evil seemed to still harm those that most needed protection... and finally he just couldn't take the guilt... he left his position as the metatron and moved himself down to earth. He felt from down here he could make more of a difference then back in heaven in his previous post. <BR><BR>Two years&nbsp;have passed,&nbsp;and rumors of his deeds slowly spreading around the globe, as news of a&nbsp;blue&nbsp;"Prophet"&nbsp;was proforming miraculous deeds, both big and small.&nbsp;To many he was only a&nbsp;urban&nbsp;legend like big foot.&nbsp;However those that met him knew the truth. In Africa he helped rebuild villages in war torn countries; in Asia he helped farmers&nbsp;rice crops produce twice more rice then was expected and assisted&nbsp;villagers in the removal of landmines; in the americas he helped the&nbsp;poor in mexico to south america helping them however he could. While never needing to sleep or eat, he found he did enjoy it on occasion and humblely accepted a grateful host's offer, while holding no malice to those who only wished him to leave. Due to him being a Divine Being, he could never be properly photographed, his&nbsp;shining aura was amplified by the camera's lenses and thus&nbsp;caused&nbsp;a large white blur to appear in his place. thus only continuing the belief that he was only a&nbsp;legend. <BR><BR>Not everything was jolly for Argent, his appearance&nbsp;has caused him much&nbsp;humiliation over instant ridicule and fear when he happens upon&nbsp;other humans, soon however he usually&nbsp;overcomes those fears by preforming acts of great kindness. He never&nbsp;feels anger at this, instead he only feels pity&nbsp;and remorse for their souls should they continue on that path. He has however vanquished&nbsp;quite a few demons back to hell as his powers began&nbsp;to resurface.&nbsp;Being as fast as he&nbsp;is he can&nbsp;be almost anywhere in a matter&nbsp;of just a few hours. he continues to revisit those that he had helped before as well as looking for more of those in need.&nbsp;he noticed however, that for the first time in a long time, he felt like&nbsp;now he was beginning to set right the millions of wrongs he caused in&nbsp;his 1000 year existance as a demon.<BR><BR><BR>&nbsp;&nbsp;<BR><IMG height=514 src="http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/wowwiki/images/d/dd/VelenCardgameArt.jpg" width=450><BR>&nbsp;</FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE></DIV></DIV>[/dohtml]
 
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If you take 'Emotional Control [Cannot be feeling fear, anger or hate]' like that, I want you to understand one thing: Your character has feelings. Even being slightly annoyed at someone else will count as feeling anger. Even doubting whether he can succeed will be feeling fear. Alright?

Mental Defences: You don't have telepathy. This costs 200 XP/lvl then.

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Not gonna comment on these... read what I put in the Origin, first.

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God... even refered to as Yahweh... doesn't personally interfere with pretty much everything... which, I'm sorry, more or less destroys that origin. And even if a demon somehow redeemed himself (I'd say it would take more than that) and was allowed into Heaven, he would never be granted powers like that...


That is from my last post. This still applies. God rarely takes any actual actions... something like a demon with a soul redeeming himself would still not be close to enough to gaining his attention. Judging from your origin, he could go freely between Heaven and Hell? That doesn't just happen. It isn't as easy as you make it out to be. And your character isn't some omnipotent guy who's been fighting demons everywhere and with all the angels, it seems, as the voice of God... again, God does not interfere or even act.
And yes, I know, he's journeyed 'down' to Earth, he's become far weaker and all that... but quite honestly? No. Your char haven't been all those things you say. It doesn't work like that.

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Due to him being a Divine Being, he could never be properly photographed, his shining aura was amplified by the camera's lenses and thus caused a large white blur to appear in his place. thus only continuing the belief that he was only a legend.


That is still a power you need to take.

Sorry if this offends you or anything, but I'll be blunt now:

Your character will NOT be a special chosen of God. There are special chosen of God, such as the Spectre, but none of those characters will be playable in any way.
 
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>_< going from the orgin.... demon's cannot exist in heaven, to have one exist would thus declare god's word wrong, and god is infalible. doing something that proves god wrong could destroy existance as we know it. that being the case when he entered heaven, yahweh gave him the choice. return to heaven, or be reborn as something else. in otherwords reincarnation as a angelic being.


next as to getting into heaven... it was more then enough. self sacrifice is one of the only things that can whipe your slate clean, combine that with the fact he wanted to be forgiven, and had been repenting for the last 10 years.

in the constantine movie, john, commiting a deadly mortal sin by commiting suiside was going to be forced in hell. at the end, he saved another soul instead of his own, and that alone freed him and allowed him too to enter the kingdom... be it a movie and not canon of the DC series it is related and would follow just about the same rules as the comics. also in the movie he tried to preform the final rights to torchure a demon as it was dying and prevent it from going to hell.. a ruse.. but a good one... as he said .. "in order to gain forgiveness you must first want it. "
 
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>_< going from the orgin.... demon's cannot exist in heaven, to have one exist would thus declare god's word wrong, and god is infalible. doing something that proves god wrong could destroy existance as we know it. that being the case when he entered heaven, yahweh gave him the choice. return to heaven, or be reborn as something else. in otherwords reincarnation as a angelic being.


Wrong. Demons can exist in Heaven... that's how they, y'know, march upon Heaven in armies when going to war... They can, if they have a soul, come to reside in heaven. And again... God would not interfere or grant him any special powers or make him his 'special demon friend' over all that... It's not gonna happen.
Actually, the Silver City (aka Heaven) was built by the Children of Lilith, which were half-demons.

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next as to getting into heaven... it was more then enough. self sacrifice is one of the only things that can whipe your slate clean, combine that with the fact he wanted to be forgiven, and had been repenting for the last 10 years.


10 years of repenting for how many years of evil? And I haven't said anywhere that he couldn't be redeemed... I've just said that he can't become something überspecial like you want him to.

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in the constantine movie, john, commiting a deadly mortal sin by commiting suiside was going to be forced in hell. at the end, he saved another soul instead of his own, and that alone freed him and allowed him too to enter the kingdom... be it a movie and not canon of the DC series it is related and would follow just about the same rules as the comics. also in the movie he tried to preform the final rights to torchure a demon as it was dying and prevent it from going to hell.. a ruse.. but a good one... as he said .. "in order to gain forgiveness you must first want it. "


Except for some names, that movie had nothing to do with Constantine, whether it was location, storyline or actions... so no, it doesn't follow the same rules.

Really, seeing how deeply rooted your char seem to be in Heaven and Hell, you should read the Lucifer series.
 
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jon, I never said he was granted special powers..... it was more of "give up a demonic existance and start a angelic one" his blood was sacrificed to gain divine blood ones.... however they were all the same powers. sacred fire was rays of hellfire, penance beam was a torchure beam. flight was gained through both demonic energy and allowed gliding by wings.


if you want a "good" reason... how about the soul that argent possessed was special. Special as to the level as he was one of yahweh's children except born without the knowledge.. and his redemption and place in heaven is all apart of yehweh's big plan, as is his decent to earth. lucifer guarding a large portion of hell, Michael and guarding heaven, Gaberel guarding the dead and Argent would end up protecting the earth and all of its fruits from outside influences.


anyway... the whole metatron thing... how much do you know about theology. the metatron is the one that is refered to in the bible as the "angel" that is sent from heaven to earth to relay gods message. the angel that stoped abram[ yes abram not abraham] from killing his son was the metatron, the angel that appeared to jesus in the desert... metatron... same one that became the "burning bush" in Exodus. the metatron is in the bible described as a 12 winged angel with 24 eyes and constantly on fire. Mearly looking at this angels awesome power is enough to cause your hair to fade permantly gray. the wiki only tells part of it. but it gives the general impression. Also according to theology legends, Metatron's Cube contained within the metatron's heart contains the Life force of energy and was used by metatron during the creation of all as given by god.. his name means "after" and "throne" meaning the one who serves behind the throne or the one who occupies the throne next to the lord. I guessed something of that nature wouldnt be allowed... even though you allowed luc to be made... >_<
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metatron


as for emotional control... ill just take iminicus's suggestion and make it "calm" instead...

and ill remove mental defences for now. they wont make sense until telepathy is learned anyway.


either way.... im not reading any comics as a prerequesite to RPing here... 2 different universes remember. I get the jist of what is going on from some wiki searches. anyways... the main reason is 1... I cant really go out and look for comics in my current condition... and 2... im broke... more or less dead once i get the bill from my insurance... >_<



anyway no biggie... ill just talk to ya on msn about it... im sure we can come up with something that is acceptable.
 
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Name:</B> Argent Valen<BR><B>
Alias:</B> Prophet<BR><B>
Race:</B> Angelic Draenor<BR><B>
Gender:</B> Male<BR><B>
Age:</B>&nbsp;3,492&nbsp;<BR><B>
Height:</B> 6'7<BR><B>
Weight:</B>&nbsp;272 <BR><B>
Hair:</B>&nbsp;White <BR><B>
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Skin:</STRONG> Ranges from Cobalt blue[calm] to Indigo[focused] depending on his current mood.<BR><B>
Alignment:</B> Lawful Good<BR><B>Personality:</B>&nbsp;Holier then thou attitude, very understanding but consiters himself above most mortal creatures and&nbsp;takes pity upon them. Tries to be humble to fit in and not draw the wrong sort of attention. <BR><B>
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Secret Origin:</B> Divinely Endowed [Rays of Sacred Flames, Immortal, Severly non human, Divine Light, Telepathy]


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Total Experience Gained:</B> 0<BR><B>
Experience Points Left To Use:</B> 0<BR><B>
Experience Points Used:</B> 10600<BR><BR><B>

Strength:</B> 1<BR><B>
Agility/Speed:</B> 7 <BR><B>
Accuracy:</B>&nbsp;1+2=3 <BR><B>
Durability:</B> 1+2=3<BR><B>
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Immortal<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent is a Divine Creature born from&nbsp;another&nbsp;realm and endowed with both&nbsp;eternal life and a divine spirit.&nbsp;As such he is a being that is immune to&nbsp;natural death.&nbsp;[discount applied to arcane knowledge, Military knowledge&nbsp;and history,&nbsp;<BR>&nbsp;720XP<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Self Contained Life Form<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>As he is an Immortal, Argent requires nothing to live or survive other then to exist. <BR>&nbsp;[all options, linked to immortal] 750XP<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Enhanced Healing Factor<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Being Immortal, Argent&nbsp;is tough to harm, and even harder to kill. His divine blood constantly regenerates his body at a&nbsp;rate&nbsp;on par with other simular beings of&nbsp;that nature.<BR>&nbsp; lvl 1, linked to&nbsp;Immortal, cannot be improved&nbsp;150XP/lvl<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Divine&nbsp;Light[Healing]<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent being a&nbsp;being of Divine orgin, feels compassion and pity for creatures below him. he can manufest his own powers to restore anothers&nbsp;strength&nbsp;and repair their wounds, this can even be&nbsp;focused on himself to increace his already enhanced&nbsp;healing factor,<BR>&nbsp; lvl 1, linked to Immortal, emotional control[must be calm]&nbsp;225XP/lvl<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Rays of Sacred Flames[Force blast, Magic(divine)]<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent&nbsp;channels the divine energy into his hands or eyes&nbsp;and fires them off at the opponent.&nbsp;These&nbsp;beams are completely controled by Argent and can change course, pass completely through defences or even completely disapate&nbsp;after being fired to prevent innocents from getting harmed.&nbsp;<BR>&nbsp;lvl 2, Linked to Immortal, Control, Armor Piercing, Emotional control[Must be calm],&nbsp;450&nbsp;XP/lvl [900xp total]<BR><STRONG>&nbsp;</STRONG><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Severely Non Human<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent was once demon born in hell, however, unlike the rest of the demons, he was born with a soul. He fought and Freed his soul from the clutches of hell, and transmigrated the right to be redemed in heaven and was transformed into a divine being by spectre, his demonic blood being replaced with the divine spirit.</EM> <EM>there exist a number of key differences between him and a human being. For one thing, he is effectively lacking what one would consider 'organs', nor does he have any blood. Possessing supernatural beauty, he seems to shine with a radiant aura at all times. He is next to immune to telepathy, and is able to survive grevious wounds as long as he has will to sustain his body.<BR>&nbsp;linked to immortal&nbsp;1035 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>

Flight</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent can fly without the requirement of wings, his Divine spirit just lifts him.<BR>&nbsp;lvl 3, Linked to Immortal, Emotional control[Must be Calm],&nbsp; 50 XP/lvl [150xp total]<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Super Speed<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent&nbsp;Can use his Afinity with&nbsp;Divine powers to boost his own physical&nbsp;speed in this realm and can move many times faster then most can see. <BR>&nbsp;Linked to Immortal,Emotional control[must be calm], ;650XP<BR><BR><STRONG>

Penance Beam</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;A ray shot in a simular form as the beams of sacred fire, however, these beams cause an opponent to fall into a deep trance like state if it overcomes their will power. It is consitered magical[divine] in nature and form. <BR>&nbsp;lvl 3, linked to immortal, disabling effect, beam does no damage, Emotional control[must be calm],&nbsp;100XP/lvl <BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Reflexive Dodge<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent can dodge attacks before&nbsp;they&nbsp;strike him&nbsp;from drawing upon the speed granted to him from his divine spirit.<BR>&nbsp;lvl 3, linked to Super Speed,&nbsp;75xp/lvl [225xp total]<BR><BR><STRONG>

Reflexive Aim</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent is able to aim with supurb accuracy.<BR>&nbsp;lvl 5,&nbsp;Emotional control[must be calm],&nbsp; 50 XP/lvl [250xp total]<BR><BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Sense Powers<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Through the Divine spirit within him he can feel creatures of exceptional strength and skill no matter what their orgin, while he doesn't know about their powers, he does however know what orgin they come from. <BR>&nbsp;lvl 1, Linked to Immortal, all orgins, Emotional control[must be calm],&nbsp;225XP/lvl<BR><BR><strong>

Prescience<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Granted through the Divine, Argent is able to sense danger shortly before it strikes him. <BR>&nbsp;lvl&nbsp;1 Linked to Immortal, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp; 150 XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>

Enhanced Vision</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Through the Divine spirit, Argent can see things most people cannot see. <BR>&nbsp;linked to immortal, can see auras and magical forces, 100 XP<BR><STRONG><BR>

Coming soon....<br><br>

Mental Defence</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;The Divine Spirit inside of him shields his mind from intruders, protecting his thoughts and actions and making them only his own. <BR>&nbsp;lvl 0, Emotional control[must be calm],&nbsp;character has telepathy&nbsp;&nbsp;100 XP/lvl [200xp total]<STRONG><BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT><FONT color=#ffffff><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM>

<BR>Telepathy<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;The Divine Spirit grants Argent the abilities to read into anothers deepest thoughts without restrictions. lvl 0, linked to immortal, Emotional control[cannot be feeling fear, anger, nor hate],&nbsp; multiple targets, project thoughts, create links, mental bolts, repair minds, undetectable.&nbsp;1395 XP/lvl<BR></EM></FONT></FONT></FONT></FONT></TD></TR>


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I.Q.</EM></STRONG><EM>&nbsp;<BR>&nbsp;Argent is a Immortal being of unparalleled Inteligence. lvl 10, 1000 XP<BR><BR></EM><EM><STRONG>

Enhanced Cognition Speed<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent can think much faster then most people of this dimention. 600 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>

Concentration</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent can focus much eayser then most people. 200 XP<BR><BR></EM><EM><STRONG>

Photographic Memory<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Argent can recall just about anything he has ever seen or known. 300 XP<BR><BR><STRONG>

Arcane Knowledge<BR></STRONG>&nbsp;Being a creature from the lands after mortal death, Argent knows about angels and demons, due to meeting with them on a day to day basis. and while the decent from heaven has caused a haze over most of his knowledge on the subject, this temporary amnesia will pass eventually.. lvl&nbsp;3 80XP/lvl <BR><BR><STRONG>

History Knowledge</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;You dont live for over 3000 years without experiencing some things, as with his arcane knowledge he has forgotten some things from the past, but nothing a refresher course or a little study time couldn't fix. lvl&nbsp;2 80XP/lvl<BR><BR><STRONG>

Military Tactics</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Argent was a strong natural leader and tactician, and&nbsp;the strength of his heart,&nbsp;loyalty, and the experance of knowing how to properly use pawns and sacrifice for the greater good. In hell, he was the commander of several legions of demons, in charge of keeping them in line and order. Unlike most of his knowledge... this much has remained with him. 270XP</EM></FONT></TD></TR>

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Traitor/Disgrace</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;Because he was once a former demon,&nbsp;their are still some angels that distrust him. almost&nbsp;all of hell's demons are in one way or another jellous of him, not for&nbsp;going to heaven, but for the power he obtained for doing so and consiter him a&nbsp;traitor and&nbsp;would consiter his death a mark of power. &nbsp;<BR>XP Worth: 300 XP<BR>&nbsp;</EM><BR></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Non-Human Appearance</STRONG><BR>&nbsp;um.... just take a look at the pics.. boney plates sticking out of the&nbsp;forehead, tenticles at the chin, blue skin, hoved feet, um yeah... i think its fair to say&nbsp;no one will mistake him for human.&nbsp;&nbsp;<BR>Severely non-human: 600 XP<BR>&nbsp;<BR></EM></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Haunted Past<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent's past is laced with the sins of&nbsp;his former life,&nbsp;those sins he repents for and every action he makes is to ammend for the unfortold&nbsp;horror, and pain he caused to hundreds of thousands of souls on earth during his thousand year existance as a Demon. After Sacrificing his life to save another, he was offered the chance to repent for his past sins.. he eagerly took spectre up on the offer and left to repent. &nbsp;&nbsp;<BR>Major Haunted Past (The reason that you do what you do, something that you always think about and can never forget): 600 XP</EM><BR><BR></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><STRONG><EM>

Guilty Conscience<BR></EM></STRONG>&nbsp;<EM>Due to the sins of his prior life, Argent still consiters his current actions a sign of penance to atone for those sins. <BR>XP Worth: 300 XP</EM><BR><BR></FONT></FONT><FONT size=1><FONT face="Verdana, Geneva, Arial, Sans-serif"><EM><STRONG>

Deadly Enemies<BR>&nbsp;</STRONG>Argent had many enemies when he was still Ragnos, most minor rival demons struggling for power and domination. Then he became a traior to demon-kind and began to repent.. still only a slight neucense... however once he was reborn into a Draenor, he became something else entirely. Any demon that could kill him would instantly gain&nbsp;power through that recognition&nbsp;or through pacts made with&nbsp;the rulers of hell. On earth, many consiter him a sign of the&nbsp;Apocolypse as the prophisized "false prophet" from revelations, and this is fueled through the proclamations of the Pope of the Catholic Church.&nbsp;Many a&nbsp;fanatic would wish him dead as well.&nbsp;That of course isnt counting the&nbsp;demons on&nbsp;earth who see him as a threat to their&nbsp;dealings on earth not to mention a threat to them personally.&nbsp;&nbsp;<BR>XP Worth: 800 XP

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Argent Valen was born as Ragnos Infernus in the year 2084 B.C. He was an abomination of the Infernal fires of Hell, however a rare thing occured; he was born with a soul. For the first 500 years of his existance he was a minion and follower of one of the rulers of hell and a loyal one at that. He commited so many crimes through possessions and caused hundreds of thousands of souls to become corrupted and decend into the darkness. <BR><BR>One day however&nbsp;as he attempted to corrupt a innocent&nbsp;10 year old homeless girl, Nina. &nbsp;by inflicting her with the most horrible nightmares and torcurous rape to spawn a demon child, he accidently was led into the remains of a ruined jewish temple. the moment he steped upon the concencrated ground his body began to feel as if it was about to explode. Before he knew it he collapsed.&nbsp;<BR><BR>His eyes awoke two weeks later, only to discover he was saved by the same girl whom he was chasing and whos soul he was attempting to darken. Something happened durring the time he was being nursed back to health. His soul, which had been stained black, gradually lightened. Over the next 10 years he remained on earth, protecting the girl and repenting his sins to the dismay of his demon king.<BR><BR>

One fateful day, A legion of demons appeared sourounding their home in an attempt to Kill the girl and return Ragnos to hell. In an act of self sacrifice Ragnos threw himself&nbsp;in the way of a Fatal blast to save her, unfortuneatly they were both killed; however, that simple act was enough to grant him the chance to redeam his soul and he asended to heaven. <BR><BR>Upon&nbsp;reaching the gates along with Nina, Spectre appeared to him and gave him a offer seeing his potential.&nbsp; Return to earth and be reborn as a Draenor, fighting demons and evil to redeam himself, or return to hell. . Ragnos willingly accepted the offer to be reborn&nbsp;and in a flash of&nbsp;bright light blacked&nbsp;out.<BR><BR>Seventy Eight years passed on earth before Ragnos awoke from his&nbsp;slumber.&nbsp;He was no longer himself, his long leathery wings were gone, his skin was a&nbsp;cobalt blue, and his&nbsp;horns changed into a boney structure upon his head; his split hoves were joined into a single horse like&nbsp;hoof; his tail, once long and lanky was now thick and&nbsp;consisted of armored segments. He awoke no longer Ragnos Infernus, but Argent Valen, a Holy a Draenor, or archdeamon of God. His past&nbsp;never forgotten, he fought on earth repenting and fighting back demons from the darkness. He continously thought about nina, and wished to someday soon be back with her.&nbsp;<BR><BR>Many millenia passed sense Argent had&nbsp;began service to the spectre.&nbsp;Durring which he had vanquished multiple demons on earth... rumors of his deeds slowly spreading around the globe, as news of a&nbsp;blue&nbsp;"Prophet"&nbsp;was proforming miraculous deeds, both big and small.&nbsp;To many he was only a&nbsp;urban&nbsp;legend like big foot.&nbsp;However those that met him knew the truth. In Africa he helped rebuild villages in war torn countries; in Asia he helped farmers&nbsp;rice crops produce twice more rice then was expected and assisted&nbsp;villagers in the removal of landmines; in the americas he helped the&nbsp;poor in mexico to south america helping them however he could. While never needing to sleep or eat, he found he did enjoy it on occasion and humblely accepted a grateful host's offer, while holding no malice to those who only wished him to leave. Due to the aura expelled from his body, he could never be properly photographed, his&nbsp;shining aura was amplified by the camera's lenses and thus&nbsp;caused&nbsp;a large white blur to appear in his place. thus only continuing the belief that he was only a&nbsp;legend. <BR><BR>Not everything was jolly for Argent, his appearance&nbsp;has caused him much&nbsp;humiliation over instant ridicule and fear when he happens upon&nbsp;other humans, soon however he usually&nbsp;overcomes those fears by preforming acts of great kindness. He never&nbsp;feels anger at this, instead he only feels pity&nbsp;and remorse for their souls should they continue on that path.&nbsp;Being as fast as he&nbsp;is he can&nbsp;be almost anywhere in a matter&nbsp;of just a few hours. he continues to revisit those that he had helped before as well as looking for more of those in need.&nbsp;.<BR><BR><BR>&nbsp;&nbsp;<BR><IMG height=514 src="http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/wowwiki/images/d/dd/VelenCardgameArt.jpg" width=450><BR>&nbsp;</FONT></P></TD></TR></TBODY></TABLE></DIV></DIV>[/dohtml]



hey jon... do i get any discounts for knowledge skills on here?
 
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Severely Non-Human Physiology: Alright, I had completely missed that you had changed this in your second version. While the no organs, no blood and beauty will be allowed, the telepathic immunity will not. I know that such things were allowed on Marvels, but they won't be on Justice. As for the part about being able to survive grievous wounds as long as he has the will to sustatiain his body, I'm gonna say no to that too, as I said on Xianian. You can say that he can survive more than humans, but as you have it, it won't be allowed.

Anything else you've changed?

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SNH phsiology.... its a almost exact duplicate from lucifers bio... they both share the same secret orgin and everything else.

"Angelic Physiology: 1080 XP. Not to labour the point, but Lucifer is an archangel, a creature of divine power and mysticism rather than mundane matter and secretions. As such, there exist a number of key differences between him and a human being. For one thing, he is effectively lacking what one would consider 'organs', except a heart, nor does he have any blood. Possessing supernatural beauty, he seems to shine with a radiant aura at all times. He is next to immune to telepathy, and is able to survive grevious wounds as long as he has will to sustain his body. (10% Discount for Secret Origin) "
 
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I didn't approve of that profile, and apparantly, EI didn't know that... I've just pm'ed Midnighter telling him that this will have to go:

He is next to immune to telepathy, and is able to survive grevious wounds as long as he has will to sustain his body.
 
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