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Dominator; New God of Domination
Topic Started: May 1 2009, 09:36 PM (203 Views)
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Right then, not sure on some of the associations with Darkseid, I don't know how much he's involved with the Darkside Club, but this is only the starting point. ^^
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<b><i>Name:</i></b>
Dominic Hugh Williams
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<b><i>Alias:</i></b>
'Mr Big', Dominator, 'Dom'
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<b><i>Race:</i></b>
New God
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<b><i>Gender:</i></b>
Male
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<b><i>Age:</i></b>
42
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<b><i>Height:</i></b>
6ft 8in
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<b><i>Weight:</i></b>
250lbs
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<b><i>Hair:</i></b>
Dark Brown
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<b><i>Eyes:</i></b>
Hazel, with a hint of black shimmering around the Iris.
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<b><i>Alignment:</i></b>
Lawful Evil
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<b><i>Personality:</i></b>
Dominic enjoys manipulating and moving people like pieces on a chess board, indeed, his powers seem to enhance his ability to do so. He plays with emotions and takes pleasure in making people do exactly as he says.
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<b><i>Team:</i></b>
[Darkside Club?]
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<b><i>Secret Origin:</i></b>
New God - Immunity to the Anti-Life Equation, Immune to having thoughts read, Impossible to Actually Kill
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113
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5387
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4
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1
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5
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1
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4
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<b><i>Empathy: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dominic has the ability to feel and manipulate a person's very emotions, to change one of the most personal things a Human being can have at the twitch of a finger. It is one of his more treasured abilities as he enjoys the feeling of power as he changes someone's mood to suit his needs rather than their own. He often uses this ability to manipulate others into doing exactly what he wants. <br>
<i>Options:</i> Read Emotions, Alter Mood, Implant Feeling, Mood Wipe, Alignment Shift, Undetectable.<br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 1150xp/lvl x 0.88(Manipulation Academic Knowledge) = 1012xp/lvl
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<b><i>Super Strength: lvl 2:</i></b>
When all else fails, Dominic is able to fall back in his incredible physical strength. Although without this ability, he is still strong enough to bench press a car, Dom enjoys the power it gives him to be able to simply hold someone back without them being able to do a thing. He enjoys the futility of anyone trying to fight him and often will forsake his telepathy for a more direct means of making someone forget who he ever was. <br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 600xp/lvl
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<b><i>Fear: lvl 0:</i></b>
Dominic is always an imposing figure, bigger than nearly all of his enemies, however, when pushed to real anger, he exudes a terrifying aura which can cause even the hardest of men to turn tail and run. This could be linked to his other powers, or it could simply be the effect of a New God's presence on Humans, but either way, no one should want to voluntarily meet this man on a dark winter's eve. <br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 350xp/lvl
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<b><i>Telepathy: lvl 0:</i></b>
Dom's most prized ability is his power to read thoughts straight from the minds of people around him without their knowing it. He can sort through the most private thoughts of his enemies and cause them to do things they might not normally be inclined to do. His power stretches to the extent that he could probably cause a Buddhist Monk to murder in cold blood. Coupled with such a dominating personality as Dom's, this power is truly dangerous. <br>
<i>Options:</i> Control Others, Create Links, Multiple Targets, Mental Bolts, Undetectable<br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 1500xp/lvl x 0.88(Manipulation Academic Knowledge) = 1320xp/lvl
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<b><i>I.Q.: lvl 6:</i></b>
Dom is far from just another Mobster, his intelligence allows him to be a truly dangerous man who knows what he wants and exactly how to get it. His cunning and ability to persuade people to do the opposite of what they originally intended are admirable and deadly traits. - 100xp/lvl
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<b><i>Wealth: lvl 8:</i></b>
Dom has amassed a far from insubstantial amount of personal wealth which generally surpasses that of most known mobsters. He has worked hard with little resources to provide himself with a constant income from anything from Petty Crimes to major Bank Robberies, although he also inherited a large sum on money including the family business. He generally has his fingers in more crime than anyone else in New York. His money only makes him more dangerous. - 200xp/lvl
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<b><i>Fighting Skills: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dom is far from harmless if anyone manages to disarm him. His incredible strength is but one trait which makes anyone brawling with him want to back off quickly. He is also an experienced hand to hand combatant, having spent his fair amount of time in the rings during his childhood as well as having to deal with assassination attempts from rivals. Although he isn't a master yet, he isn't to be trifled with either. - 200xp/lvl
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<b><i>Targeting: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dom is proficient enough with firearms, although he doesn't really need to be. He can hear potentially dangerous thoughts if he needs to and stop the person before they get a chance to attack. - Pistols and Rifles - 175xp/lvl
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<b><i>Academic Knowledge - Manipulation: lvl 6:</i></b>
Dominic has made Manipulation an art and is extremely well versed in it. He knows exactly which 'buttons' to push to make someone do something he wants them to, even if he didn't have his incredible abilities to help him with it. His tongue could easily be described as silver and he uses this skill often enough. By studying this art, however, he feels that he understands his own abilities of persuasion much better. - 75xp/lvl
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<b><i>High School Graduate:</i></b>
Dom was educated in England in a fairly good school and understands all the knowledge imparted from such an institution. - 150xp
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<b><i>Extremely Deadly Enemies:</i></b>
'Mr Big' orchestrates most of the organised crime in New York City. His influence is legendary and yet somehow anyone caught by the cops has had every memory of him wiped from their minds or they commit suicide in their cell block. Although his identity isn't known by the Police, Dom is a wanted man and he has to tread very carefully in all his criminal affairs. There is also the possibility that Super Heroes may target his work. Rival Gangs are always a problem and although many have learnt to endure his iron fist, there are some whom Dom has failed to subvert, a failing his is very aggravated by. - 800xp
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<b><i>Major Psychological Restriction:</i></b>
Dom is terrified of Darkseid, although he doesn't show it. Because of this he will do absolutely anything for Darkseid, in fear of the God. His loyalty is utterly out of fear and it is possible that Darkseid knows it. All the same, Dominic will disregard all rules and problems in a desire to do the will of Darkseid. - 400xp
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<b><i>Won't Break Darkseid's Law:</i></b>
Dom will not break Darkseid's laws under any circumstances. - 300xp
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Dominic Williams was born in East London, England, and brought up as a fairly normal kid in the city. His father owned controlling shares in Prodigal Incorporated, a company which mainly designed cars and motorbikes, but also had subsidiaries in other industries. Although his father didn't like to take part in the day to day running of the company, Dom was shunned for being a 'rich kid'. It took time and peer pressure, but he began to move in gang circles, smuggling guns in his back pack for older kids, and taking on a rough and tough outer façade which slowly became his true identity, which he hid from his parents. He became a heroin addict, and it was a testament to his will power later in life when he weaned himself off it. All the while, his parents believed that he was simply attending after school activities, never questioning that their son might have thrown in his lot with the wrong people.<br>
Dom finally left home aged twenty, with his parents consent as they were still in the dark about what he did in the alleyways and back roads of London. He drifted for a while, trying to find a job which really interested him, taking the gangs and drugs out of the equation for now. But after months of trying different jobs, none of which were to his taste, he decided to try a new tact. He used persuasion and trickery to ascend the ranks in a gang, beating anyone in his way to death as his strength grew in proportion. He soon found that he was stronger than nearly every gang member and suddenly no-one in his syndicate wanted to challenge his authority without a gun or back up by their side. He was the 'Mr Big' of London crime and his slowly arriving abilities heralded a new age for him, but he shared the secret with no-one. <br>
But the police presence in London was onto him, they were slowly pulling up leads which would take them right to him and he knew it. So he killed the last guy who knew where he'd be and packed his bags, leaving London. He initially couldn't figure out where to go, there were choices, but he couldn't pick, until his eyes landed on the flight to New York. Something drew him towards it, something inexplicable, something powerful. <br>
In New York, Dom met a woman named Hannah Morrison. They began a relationship which became extremely passionate as the weeks rolled by, but as Dom began to extend his fingers into the criminal underworld, he felt a change coming over him, becoming a frequent visitor of the Darkside Club, meeting the owner, Boss Dark Side. He began to take pleasure in manipulating people, Hannah especially, into doing exactly what he wanted. As Hannah discovered what was happening, she attempted to make him stop, but he remorselessly broke her neck. He had been having dreams about the fall of the gods and he finally began to realise who he really was meant to be. Going to Boss Dark Side, he pledged his loyalty to the man, as with his understanding of his own powers, came a realisation that he should never, ever trifle with Darkseid. He understood but a fraction of the God's power and feared it. He took over the day to day organisation of the Boss's criminal empire, allowing Darkseid to attend to other matters. <br>
Twelve years after he left the family home in London, he was contacted by the family lawyer who told him that his father and mother had died in a car accident, leaving all their earthly belongings to him. He took the money, shares, and valuables, and auctioned anything which wasn't worth anything to him. Which was nearly everything. He now owned the controlling shares in Prodigal Incorporated and used it as a base income to his criminal activities. <br>
Another ten years and Dominic Williams is the King of Crime in New York City, the place holder for Darkseid, but a man with power nonetheless. He has more than his fair share of enemies with this power, however, he knows the threat of costumed heroes will be a significant one and there are some of the idealistic cops whom he hasn't been able to buy off. Rival gangs whom he hasn't had the pleasure of meeting yet are trying to build the courage to challenge him and he knows very well that his position could change at any time. But he is a leader with an iron fist and will not accept defeat should Darkseid not wish it.
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Alright ill read through more later, but these corrections may change things on your profile so ill do them now:

Your deadly enemies challenge is not extreme. Extreme means pretty much everyone is activley going to be gunning for you. If he isnt known to BE Mr. Big outside Darkseid and if people who DO know die, the enemies arent that bad. Besides, you need to have MULTIPLE POWERFUL organizations and MULTIPLE POWERFUL people for this, not just any joe-super hero. If you made it so more people knew about it id be willing to give ya Major, but if not ill give you medium. So either make it so more people know and loose 200, or keep it as is and loose 400

your Wont Break Darkseid's laws also will not be allowed. All that covers is already covered by his psychological restriction and im not going to let you get twice the expierience for the same challenge. So thats 300 xp you need to remove.

Fix that and then ill take a longer look
 
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Ok, Deadly Enemies and Won't Break Laws challenges dismissed. ^^
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<b><i>Name:</i></b>
Dominic Hugh Williams
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<b><i>Alias:</i></b>
'Mr Big', Dominator, 'Dom'
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<b><i>Race:</i></b>
New God
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<b><i>Gender:</i></b>
Male
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<b><i>Age:</i></b>
42
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<b><i>Height:</i></b>
6ft 8in
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<b><i>Weight:</i></b>
250lbs
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<b><i>Hair:</i></b>
Dark Brown
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<b><i>Eyes:</i></b>
Hazel, with a hint of black shimmering around the Iris.
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<b><i>Alignment:</i></b>
Lawful Evil
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<b><i>Personality:</i></b>
Dominic enjoys manipulating and moving people like pieces on a chess board, indeed, his powers seem to enhance his ability to do so. He plays with emotions and takes pleasure in making people do exactly as he says.
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<b><i>Team:</i></b>
[Darkside Club?]
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<b><i>Secret Origin:</i></b>
New God - Immunity to the Anti-Life Equation, Immune to having thoughts read, Impossible to Actually Kill
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13
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<b><i>Experience Points Used:</i></b>
5387
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<b><i>Strength:</i></b>
4
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<b><i>Agility:</i></b>
1
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5
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<b><i>Empathy: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dominic has the ability to feel and manipulate a person's very emotions, to change one of the most personal things a Human being can have at the twitch of a finger. It is one of his more treasured abilities as he enjoys the feeling of power as he changes someone's mood to suit his needs rather than their own. He often uses this ability to manipulate others into doing exactly what he wants. <br>
<i>Options:</i> Read Emotions, Alter Mood, Implant Feeling, Mood Wipe, Alignment Shift, Undetectable.<br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 1150xp/lvl x 0.88(Manipulation Academic Knowledge) = 1012xp/lvl
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<b><i>Super Strength: lvl 1:</i></b>
When all else fails, Dominic is able to fall back in his incredible physical strength. Although without this ability, he is still strong enough to bench press a car, Dom enjoys the power it gives him to be able to simply hold someone back without them being able to do a thing. He enjoys the futility of anyone trying to fight him and often will forsake his telepathy for a more direct means of making someone forget who he ever was. <br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 600xp/lvl
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<b><i>Fear: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dominic is always an imposing figure, bigger than nearly all of his enemies, however, when pushed to real anger, he exudes a terrifying aura which can cause even the hardest of men to turn tail and run. This could be linked to his other powers, or it could simply be the effect of a New God's presence on Humans, but either way, no one should want to voluntarily meet this man on a dark winter's eve. <br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 350xp/lvl
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<b><i>Telepathy: lvl 0:</i></b>
Dom's most prized ability is his power to read thoughts straight from the minds of people around him without their knowing it. He can sort through the most private thoughts of his enemies and cause them to do things they might not normally be inclined to do. His power stretches to the extent that he could probably cause a Buddhist Monk to murder in cold blood. Coupled with such a dominating personality as Dom's, this power is truly dangerous. <br>
<i>Options:</i> Control Others, Create Links, Multiple Targets, Mental Bolts, Undetectable<br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 1500xp/lvl x 0.88(Manipulation Academic Knowledge) = 1320xp/lvl
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<b><i>I.Q.: lvl 6:</i></b>
Dom is far from just another Mobster, his intelligence allows him to be a truly dangerous man who knows what he wants and exactly how to get it. His cunning and ability to persuade people to do the opposite of what they originally intended are admirable and deadly traits. - 100xp/lvl
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<b><i>Wealth: lvl 9:</i></b>
Dom has amassed a far from insubstantial amount of personal wealth which generally surpasses that of most known mobsters. He has worked hard with little resources to provide himself with a constant income from anything from Petty Crimes to major Bank Robberies, although he also inherited a large sum on money including the family business. He generally has his fingers in more crime than anyone else in New York. His money only makes him more dangerous. - 200xp/lvl
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<b><i>Fighting Skills: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dom is far from harmless if anyone manages to disarm him. His incredible strength is but one trait which makes anyone brawling with him want to back off quickly. He is also an experienced hand to hand combatant, having spent his fair amount of time in the rings during his childhood as well as having to deal with assassination attempts from rivals. Although he isn't a master yet, he isn't to be trifled with either. - 200xp/lvl
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<b><i>Targeting: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dom is proficient enough with firearms, although he doesn't really need to be. He can hear potentially dangerous thoughts if he needs to and stop the person before they get a chance to attack. - Pistols and Rifles - 175xp/lvl
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<b><i>Academic Knowledge - Manipulation: lvl 6:</i></b>
Dominic has made Manipulation an art and is extremely well versed in it. He knows exactly which 'buttons' to push to make someone do something he wants them to, even if he didn't have his incredible abilities to help him with it. His tongue could easily be described as silver and he uses this skill often enough. By studying this art, however, he feels that he understands his own abilities of persuasion much better. - 75xp/lvl
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<b><i>High School Graduate:</i></b>
Dom was educated in England in a fairly good school and understands all the knowledge imparted from such an institution. - 150xp
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<b><i>Major Deadly Enemies:</i></b>
'Mr Big' orchestrates most of the organised crime in New York City. His influence is legendary and yet somehow anyone caught by the cops has had every memory of him wiped from their minds or they commit suicide in their cell block. Although his identity isn't known by the Police, Dom is a wanted man and he has to tread very carefully in all his criminal affairs. There is also the possibility that Super Heroes may target his work. Rival Gangs are always a problem and although many have learnt to endure his iron fist, there are some whom Dom has failed to subvert, a failing his is very aggravated by. He is on the FBI most wanted list, the CIA have a file on him, the NSA have agents actively hacking the internet for news of his whereabouts, he's more wanted than nearly any other man in the world. - 600xp
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<b><i>Major Psychological Restriction:</i></b>
Dom is terrified of Darkseid, although he doesn't show it. Because of this he will do absolutely anything for Darkseid, in fear of the God. His loyalty is utterly out of fear and it is possible that Darkseid knows it. All the same, Dominic will disregard all rules and problems in a desire to do the will of Darkseid. - 400xp
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<b><i>Outlaw:</i></b>
'Mr Big' is currently high on the FBI most wanted list and an ever increasing team is attempting to track him down, as they join forces with the NSA, CIA and other national security agencies. - 350xp
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Dominic Williams was born in East London, England, and brought up as a fairly normal kid in the city. His father owned controlling shares in Prodigal Incorporated, a company which mainly designed cars and motorbikes, but also had subsidiaries in other industries. Although his father didn't like to take part in the day to day running of the company, Dom was shunned for being a 'rich kid'. It took time and peer pressure, but he began to move in gang circles, smuggling guns in his back pack for older kids, and taking on a rough and tough outer façade which slowly became his true identity, which he hid from his parents. He became a heroin addict, and it was a testament to his will power later in life when he weaned himself off it. All the while, his parents believed that he was simply attending after school activities, never questioning that their son might have thrown in his lot with the wrong people.<br>
Dom finally left home aged twenty, with his parents consent as they were still in the dark about what he did in the alleyways and back roads of London. He drifted for a while, trying to find a job which really interested him, taking the gangs and drugs out of the equation for now. But after months of trying different jobs, none of which were to his taste, he decided to try a new tact. He used persuasion and trickery to ascend the ranks in a gang, beating anyone in his way to death as his strength grew in proportion. He soon found that he was stronger than nearly every gang member and suddenly no-one in his syndicate wanted to challenge his authority without a gun or back up by their side. He was the 'Mr Big' of London crime and his slowly arriving abilities heralded a new age for him, but he shared the secret with no-one. <br>
But the police presence in London was onto him, they were slowly pulling up leads which would take them right to him and he knew it. So he killed the last guy who knew where he'd be and packed his bags, leaving London. He initially couldn't figure out where to go, there were choices, but he couldn't pick, until his eyes landed on the flight to New York. Something drew him towards it, something inexplicable, something powerful. <br>
In New York, Dom met a woman named Hannah Morrison. They began a relationship which became extremely passionate as the weeks rolled by, but as Dom began to extend his fingers into the criminal underworld, he felt a change coming over him, becoming a frequent visitor of the Darkside Club, meeting the owner, Boss Dark Side. He began to take pleasure in manipulating people, Hannah especially, into doing exactly what he wanted. As Hannah discovered what was happening, she attempted to make him stop, but he remorselessly broke her neck. He had been having dreams about the fall of the gods and he finally began to realise who he really was meant to be. Going to Boss Dark Side, he pledged his loyalty to the man, as with his understanding of his own powers, came a realisation that he should never, ever trifle with Darkseid. He understood but a fraction of the God's power and feared it. He took over the day to day organisation of the Boss's criminal empire, allowing Darkseid to attend to other matters. <br>
Twelve years after he left the family home in London, he was contacted by the family lawyer who told him that his father and mother had died in a car accident, leaving all their earthly belongings to him. He took the money, shares, and valuables, and auctioned anything which wasn't worth anything to him. Which was nearly everything. He now owned the controlling shares in Prodigal Incorporated and used it as a base income to his criminal activities. <br>
Another ten years and Dominic Williams is the King of Crime in New York City, the place holder for Darkseid, but a man with power nonetheless. He has more than his fair share of enemies with this power, however, he knows the threat of costumed heroes will be a significant one and there are some of the idealistic cops whom he hasn't been able to buy off. Rival gangs whom he hasn't had the pleasure of meeting yet are trying to build the courage to challenge him and he knows very well that his position could change at any time. But he is a leader with an iron fist and will not accept defeat should Darkseid not wish it.
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Alright, first, give the New God a name and a sphere of influence (like my new god for Entropy is named Alea the New God of Chance), just put that under secret origin with the rest of the description.

second, your description of his fighting throughout the profile is a bit odd. He only has one durability, thats an average human, I understand his strength is superior but you do realize if he gets into a physical fight he IS going to get his ass handed to him easily right?

Third, your academic knowledge discount is fine for empathy but unless you get rid of mental bolts it will not be acceptable for telepathy as that has nothing to do with manipulation. So get rid of mental bolts and you can keep the discount, or get rid of the discount.

Fourth, please put more into his wealth skill. Level 9 is immense, like really really fricken immense. It's not just that he has more money than mobsters, he has more money than some COUNTRIES at that level given that level 10 can support a space station (which we needed an international effort for in the real world). So unless you give me more reason why he has such a massive amount of wealth you are going to have to lower that.

Fifth and final, your XP usage is off, you've spent 5337 xp, you DO have 13 remaining however.

So change those and i'll take another look
 
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Done, I believe. ^^
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<b><i>Name:</i></b>
Dominic Hugh Williams
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<b><i>Alias:</i></b>
'Mr Big', Dominator, 'Dom'
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<b><i>Race:</i></b>
New God
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<b><i>Gender:</i></b>
Male
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<b><i>Age:</i></b>
42
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<b><i>Height:</i></b>
6ft 8in
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<b><i>Weight:</i></b>
250lbs
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Dark Brown
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<b><i>Eyes:</i></b>
Hazel, with a hint of black shimmering around the Iris.
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<b><i>Alignment:</i></b>
Lawful Evil
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<b><i>Personality:</i></b>
Dominic enjoys manipulating and moving people like pieces on a chess board, indeed, his powers seem to enhance his ability to do so. He plays with emotions and takes pleasure in making people do exactly as he says.
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<b><i>Team:</i></b>
[Darkside Club?]
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<b><i>Secret Origin:</i></b>
New God - Immunity to the Anti-Life Equation, Immune to having thoughts read, Impossible to Actually Kill - Doru, the New God of Domination.
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13
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5337
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4
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1
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4
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3
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<b><i>Empathy: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dominic has the ability to feel and manipulate a person's very emotions, to change one of the most personal things a Human being can have at the twitch of a finger. It is one of his more treasured abilities as he enjoys the feeling of power as he changes someone's mood to suit his needs rather than their own. He often uses this ability to manipulate others into doing exactly what he wants. <br>
<i>Options:</i> Read Emotions, Alter Mood, Implant Feeling, Mood Wipe, Alignment Shift, Undetectable.<br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 1150xp/lvl x 0.88(Manipulation Academic Knowledge) = 1012xp/lvl
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<b><i>Super Strength: lvl 1:</i></b>
When all else fails, Dominic is able to fall back in his incredible physical strength. Although without this ability, he is still strong enough to bench press a car, Dom enjoys the power it gives him to be able to simply hold someone back without them being able to do a thing. He enjoys the futility of anyone trying to fight him and often will forsake his telepathy for a more direct means of making someone forget who he ever was. <br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 600xp/lvl
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<b><i>Fear: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dominic is always an imposing figure, bigger than nearly all of his enemies, however, when pushed to real anger, he exudes a terrifying aura which can cause even the hardest of men to turn tail and run. This could be linked to his other powers, or it could simply be the effect of a New God's presence on Humans, but either way, no one should want to voluntarily meet this man on a dark winter's eve. <br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 350xp/lvl
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<b><i>Telepathy: lvl 0:</i></b>
Dom's most prized ability is his power to read thoughts straight from the minds of people around him without their knowing it. He can sort through the most private thoughts of his enemies and cause them to do things they might not normally be inclined to do. His power stretches to the extent that he could probably cause a Buddhist Monk to murder in cold blood. Coupled with such a dominating personality as Dom's, this power is truly dangerous. <br>
<i>Options:</i> Control Others, Create Links, Multiple Targets, Undetectable<br>
<i>Total Cost:</i> 1100xp/lvl x 0.88(Manipulation Academic Knowledge) = 968xp/lvl
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<b><i>I.Q.: lvl 6:</i></b>
Dom is far from just another Mobster, his intelligence allows him to be a truly dangerous man who knows what he wants and exactly how to get it. His cunning and ability to persuade people to do the opposite of what they originally intended are admirable and deadly traits. - 100xp/lvl
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<b><i>Wealth: lvl 9:</i></b>
Dom has amassed a far from insubstantial amount of personal wealth which generally surpasses that of most known mobsters. He has worked hard with little resources to provide himself with a constant income from anything from Petty Crimes to major Bank Robberies, although he also inherited a large sum on money including the family business. He generally has his fingers in more crime than anyone else in New York. His money only makes him more dangerous. Since gaining such a large amount of money, he has only multiplied it, investing prudently with an intelligent mind for business and ensuring that his personal wealth has grown to the state where he can afford any luxury, so that he can finance his illicit operations without thought to the cost, which only bring him more money. He no longer cares for monetary advancement, but seeks dominion over others alongside this resource. - 200xp/lvl
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<b><i>Fighting Skills: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dom is far from harmless if anyone manages to disarm him. His incredible strength is but one trait which makes anyone brawling with him want to back off quickly. He is also an experienced hand to hand combatant, having spent his fair amount of time in the rings during his childhood as well as having to deal with assassination attempts from rivals. Although he isn't a master yet, he isn't to be trifled with either. - 200xp/lvl
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<b><i>Targeting: lvl 1:</i></b>
Dom is proficient enough with firearms, although he doesn't really need to be. He can hear potentially dangerous thoughts if he needs to and stop the person before they get a chance to attack. - Pistols and Rifles - 175xp/lvl
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<b><i>Academic Knowledge - Manipulation: lvl 6:</i></b>
Dominic has made Manipulation an art and is extremely well versed in it. He knows exactly which 'buttons' to push to make someone do something he wants them to, even if he didn't have his incredible abilities to help him with it. His tongue could easily be described as silver and he uses this skill often enough. By studying this art, however, he feels that he understands his own abilities of persuasion much better. - 75xp/lvl
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<b><i>High School Graduate:</i></b>
Dom was educated in England in a fairly good school and understands all the knowledge imparted from such an institution. - 150xp
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<b><i>Major Deadly Enemies:</i></b>
'Mr Big' orchestrates most of the organised crime in New York City. His influence is legendary and yet somehow anyone caught by the cops has had every memory of him wiped from their minds or they commit suicide in their cell block. Although his identity isn't known by the Police, Dom is a wanted man and he has to tread very carefully in all his criminal affairs. There is also the possibility that Super Heroes may target his work. Rival Gangs are always a problem and although many have learnt to endure his iron fist, there are some whom Dom has failed to subvert, a failing his is very aggravated by. He is on the FBI most wanted list, the CIA have a file on him, the NSA have agents actively hacking the internet for news of his whereabouts, he's more wanted than nearly any other man in the world. - 600xp
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<b><i>Major Psychological Restriction:</i></b>
Dom is terrified of Darkseid, although he doesn't show it. Because of this he will do absolutely anything for Darkseid, in fear of the God. His loyalty is utterly out of fear and it is possible that Darkseid knows it. All the same, Dominic will disregard all rules and problems in a desire to do the will of Darkseid. - 400xp
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'Mr Big' is currently high on the FBI most wanted list and an ever increasing team is attempting to track him down, as they join forces with the NSA, CIA and other national security agencies. - 350xp
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Dominic Williams was born in East London, England, and brought up as a fairly normal kid in the city. His father owned controlling shares in Prodigal Incorporated, a company which mainly designed cars and motorbikes, but also had subsidiaries in other industries. Although his father didn't like to take part in the day to day running of the company, Dom was shunned for being a 'rich kid'. It took time and peer pressure, but he began to move in gang circles, smuggling guns in his back pack for older kids, and taking on a rough and tough outer façade which slowly became his true identity, which he hid from his parents. He became a heroin addict, and it was a testament to his will power later in life when he weaned himself off it. All the while, his parents believed that he was simply attending after school activities, never questioning that their son might have thrown in his lot with the wrong people.<br>
Dom finally left home aged twenty, with his parents consent as they were still in the dark about what he did in the alleyways and back roads of London. He drifted for a while, trying to find a job which really interested him, taking the gangs and drugs out of the equation for now. But after months of trying different jobs, none of which were to his taste, he decided to try a new tact. He used persuasion and trickery to ascend the ranks in a gang, beating anyone in his way to death as his strength grew in proportion. He soon found that he was stronger than nearly every gang member and suddenly no-one in his syndicate wanted to challenge his authority without a gun or back up by their side. He was the 'Mr Big' of London crime and his slowly arriving abilities heralded a new age for him, but he shared the secret with no-one. <br>
But the police presence in London was onto him, they were slowly pulling up leads which would take them right to him and he knew it. So he killed the last guy who knew where he'd be and packed his bags, leaving London. He initially couldn't figure out where to go, there were choices, but he couldn't pick, until his eyes landed on the flight to New York. Something drew him towards it, something inexplicable, something powerful. <br>
In New York, Dom met a woman named Hannah Morrison. They began a relationship which became extremely passionate as the weeks rolled by, but as Dom began to extend his fingers into the criminal underworld, he felt a change coming over him, becoming a frequent visitor of the Darkside Club, meeting the owner, Boss Dark Side. He began to take pleasure in manipulating people, Hannah especially, into doing exactly what he wanted. As Hannah discovered what was happening, she attempted to make him stop, but he remorselessly broke her neck. He had been having dreams about the fall of the gods and he finally began to realise who he really was meant to be. Going to Boss Dark Side, he pledged his loyalty to the man, as with his understanding of his own powers, came a realisation that he should never, ever trifle with Darkseid. He understood but a fraction of the God's power and feared it. He took over the day to day organisation of the Boss's criminal empire, allowing Darkseid to attend to other matters. <br>
Twelve years after he left the family home in London, he was contacted by the family lawyer who told him that his father and mother had died in a car accident, leaving all their earthly belongings to him. He took the money, shares, and valuables, and auctioned anything which wasn't worth anything to him. Which was nearly everything. He now owned the controlling shares in Prodigal Incorporated and used it as a base income to his criminal activities. <br>
Another ten years and Dominic Williams is the King of Crime in New York City, the place holder for Darkseid, but a man with power nonetheless. He has more than his fair share of enemies with this power, however, he knows the threat of costumed heroes will be a significant one and there are some of the idealistic cops whom he hasn't been able to buy off. Rival gangs whom he hasn't had the pleasure of meeting yet are trying to build the courage to challenge him and he knows very well that his position could change at any time. But he is a leader with an iron fist and will not accept defeat should Darkseid not wish it.
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Alright, looks good now.

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bump :)
Need him approved so that I can not use him for 4 weeks :D
 
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